television advertising directed towards young children should not be allowed

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television advertising directed towards young children should not be allowed.

Controversy exists over whether parents should let their young children watch advertisement programs by the use of television. As far as I am concerned, it is vital for children to watch advertising shown on television because not only, children can learn essential information but also this program are amusing. In the following paragraphs, I will pinpoint my case.

The first point worth mentioning is that television advertising can educate children. They can not think accurately and do not consider their well-being. Therefore, parents pay attention to their children and oblige them to eat useful nutrients necessary for the body. However, most of the time, children do not listen to their parents and prefer junk food. Television shows in this case come to help parents by showing about foods that are suitable for children. These shows applied graphical dolls and animation to convince children what is necessary and more important. After that, the tendency of children towards junk snacks can be declined. For instance, my sister's son always cries and does not eat cereals which is a good breakfast. His father showed him a program about a superhero eating cereal to get stronger. After that, he always eat that and the problem was solved.

A further more subtle reason is that the advertising programs shown by television are amusing for children. Nowadays, parents have to work a great deal of their time to earn money and could supply their own child. Therefore, they do not have enough time to play and hang out with their child. Since television advertising is shown all the time, it can amuse children and give parents time to relax and provide well types of equipment for children. For instance, when my sister was a little child, I was at high and the volume of my homework was high. Also, my parents were working all time caused my sister to get bored. After that, my parents bought a TV and save my sister from boredom, and it enables us to focus on our challenges.

To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, it is highly beneficial for children to watch advertising due to learning new knowledge and amusement it provides.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 846, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'eats'.
Suggestion: eats
... to get stronger. After that, he always eat that and the problem was solved. A f...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, so, therefore, well, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1811.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94808743169 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67367980646 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546448087432 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.0997283423 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.2380952381 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4285714286 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.85714285714 5.45110844103 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216891421099 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068796136644 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795375038877 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141758382759 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606281611616 0.0645574589148 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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