Television advertising toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Some people believe that television advertising toward the young children is beneficial because they think exposing the children to TV adds will help the children to know what they like or dislike. In contrast to this, I think TV should not telecast advertisements that are created to attract children attention for the following two reasons.
First of all, TV advertisements for the children is not a good idea because it will make them impolite and aggressive. For example, a research has shown that children that are so used to watching TV, have increased level of undisciplined attitude. For instance the children will ask for the toy/merchandise shown on the TV from their parents to buy for them and if they don't get it, they will cry, create a scene till they get one. However, if don't expose the children to such advertisements, we can avoid crazy behaviors in the kids. Thus, it's important as a parent to understand and to limit to what extent and what content their child sees TV.
Second of all, product marketing that's done on TV is not beneficial for the children because there logical capabilities decrease. For example, the children tends to have their imagination based on the TV advertisement only, they can't really think of other than the same cartoons they are being showed and the products which are also based on the same popular TV shows that they watch and hence we are losing the children intellectually. Therefore, me must not allow the our children to watch TV advertisements directed towards them.
In conclusion, the above listed two reasons explain why I agree with the fact that TV should not telecast advertisements that are created to attract children attention.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, really, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, first of all, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1418.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 286.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95804195804 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8664846615 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541958041958 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 420.3 618.680645161 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.765699451 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.909090909 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.7272727273 5.45110844103 270% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234883511761 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103987498776 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0797213594654 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172695345656 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.082114843924 0.0645574589148 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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