in their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasize that their products are new in some ways. Why is this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development.
Hitherto, dramatic globalization has resulted in an increase in the quality of product advertising, raising questions about the purpose of this development and whether this evolution brings our society benefits or drawbacks have been raising public attention. While many people lament that this is an absolutely negative development, I will overlook this lucrativeness by giving some rational reasons.
Let’s go back into the past to see what inspired human beings to create this revolution. When the manufacturing market was saturated, many businesses made an effort to gain customers so that they could generate more income and be more resilient after the economic downturn. They attempted to advertise in traditional ways, such as: in America, there was a campaign for bringing new items directly to customers' lodgings where the rate of purchasing products is the highest, or making banners. But they soon realized that customers were always interested in new useful products, so advertising their goods as the newest in the world was the best way to sell items.
On the one hand, this advertising method may put businesses’ economies in danger. There is a possibility that the new items can vanish prevailing goods from market due to the new goods, for example: The world witnessed a decrease in American stocks a few years ago. There was an economic crisis due to the excess of domestic products in their houses. Therefore, the prices of those items dropped significantly and created a sluggish development period in this nation. Furthermore, it appeared that the newest is not simply the best , it seem like resident realized this in long time ago, although many high-tech products are introduced in selling field, there are tons of foreseeable drawbacks in these items. One of the most visible examples is the house cleaning robot, which can clean residents' homes without requiring human physical strength, but it is extremely slow and unnecessary because humans can do it faster and cleaner.
To summarize, the demand for new products in the manufacturing market is increasing. However, before introducing these goods to citizens, we must conduct a survey to determine whether or not these goods are appealing to humans.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Message: Did you mean 'seems'?
Suggestion: seems
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Line 4, column 176, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
..., we must conduct a survey to determine whether or not these goods are appealing to humans.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, while, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1878.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26050420168 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8682513102 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613445378151 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.5344181023 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.142857143 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253265436505 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808988572462 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488228559283 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13400301654 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0581723829791 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.92 8.01818996416 124% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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