Today, a prevalent statement we often see is that more money should be spent in supporting the art rather than cultivating athletics and holding sport events. This is because the arts could make people relax and enhance the ability of appreciating artworks. Opponents, however, argue that the supporting of sport events values a lot. The cost of cultivating athletics should not be less than supporting the art. As far as I am concerned, the latter view seems align more with my perspective. Three reasons would suffice here to support my perspective.
To begin with, holding sport events could stimulate people's desire of doing sport. Specifically, the majority of people tend to exercise more if the government could provide an astrosphere which encourages everyone to play sport. For instance, my hometown holds up the running race every year. People who win the first place would be invited to the television program. My cousin, one of the champions, had worked hard for it, including keeping running everyday, and doing other exercise to enhance his sporting ability. My cousin had a serious disease at his young age. After his hard working to do sport, he is becoming increasingly healthy. Thus, holding more sport events could make people exercise a lot. Certainly, more exercises make people more healthy.
Aside from stimulating the desire of doing sport, an in-depth reason, perhaps just as significant is that holding more sport events could help people make more friends. On the contemporary, more and more people have their own interest. Depending on a study from the University of Tokyo, 97-percent students claim that they have made friends from taking part in sport activities. This is because the people who attend the same race usually share the same topic. At least they love the same sport. I meet my best friends while playing basketball as a member of my school team, and we usually watch the NBA after school. On the contrary, assume that there is no basketball race hold, I would never meet him.
Admittedly, a minority of people tend to believe that spending more money in support of the art could enhance people's ability of appreciating artworks. Nevertheless, if we could analyze this issue from a different perspective, we could find they have oversimplified the fact that the people who love the art are less than crazy for sport. Almost everybody could join sport events and have fun. But they may have no ability of comprehending the meaning of artworks. Holding sport events could make more people enjoy.
I would like to reiterate that the cost of holding sport events should not less than supporting the art. If there is anyone who still wonders whether holding sport events could stimulate the desire of doing sports, and anyone who still doubts that holding more sport events could help people make more friends, and anyone who still argues that holding sport events could make more people enjoy, this essay would be my response.
Today, a prevalent statement we often see is that more money should be spent in supporting the art rather than cultivating athletics and holding sport events. This is because the arts could make people relax and enhance the ability of appreciating artworks. Opponents, however, argue that the supporting of sport events values a lot. The cost of cultivating athletics should not be less than supporting the art. As far as I am concerned, the latter view seems align more with my perspective. Three reasons would suffice here to support my perspective.
To begin with, holding sport events could stimulate people's desire of doing sport. Specifically, the majority of people tend to exercise more if the government could provide an astrosphere which encourages everyone to play sport. For instance, my hometown holds up the running race every year. People who win the first place would be invited to the television program. My cousin, one of the champions, had worked hard for it, including keeping running everyday, and doing other exercise to enhance his sporting ability. My cousin had a serious disease at his young age. After his hard working to do sport, he is becoming increasingly healthy. Thus, holding more sport events could make people exercise a lot. Certainly, more exercises make people more healthy.
Aside from stimulating the desire of doing sport, an in-depth reason, perhaps just as significant is that holding more sport events could help people make more friends. On the contemporary, more and more people have their own interest. Depending on a study from the University of Tokyo, 97-percent students claim that they have made friends from taking part in sport activities. This is because the people who attend the same race usually share the same topic. At least they love the same sport. I meet my best friends while playing basketball as a member of my school team, and we usually watch the NBA after school. On the contrary, assume that there is no basketball race hold, I would never meet him.
Admittedly, a minority of people tend to believe that spending more money in support of the art could enhance people's ability of appreciating artworks. Nevertheless, if we could analyze this issue from a different perspective, we could find they have oversimplified the fact that the people who love the art are less than crazy for sport. Almost everybody could join sport events and have fun. But they may have no ability of comprehending the meaning of artworks. Holding sport events could make more people enjoy.
I would like to reiterate that the cost of holding sport events should not less than supporting the art. If there is anyone who still wonders whether holding sport events could stimulate the desire of doing sports, and anyone who still doubts that holding more sport events could help people make more friends, and anyone who still argues that holding sport events could make more people enjoy, this essay would be my response.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 453, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... hard for it, including keeping running everyday, and doing other exercise to enhance hi...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, thus, while, at least, for instance, on the contrary, to begin with, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2492.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 494.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04453441296 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53956223029 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453441295547 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 755.1 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.2247276169 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9310344828 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0344827586 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.89655172414 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 11.8709677419 202% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.477563344495 0.236089414692 202% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140985899123 0.076458572812 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.153341984887 0.0737576698707 208% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.313976348011 0.150856017488 208% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.182643798647 0.0645574589148 283% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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