Today, a prevalent statement we often see is that more money should be spent in supporting the art rather than cultivating athletics and holding sport events. This is because the arts could make people relax and enhance the ability of appreciating artworks. Opponents, however, argue that the supporting of sport events values a lot. The cost of cultivating athletics should not be less than supporting the art. As far as I am concerned, the latter view seems align more with my perspective. Three reasons would suffice here to support my perspective.
To begin with, holding sport events could stimulate people's desire of doing sport. Specifically, the majority of people tend to exercise more if the government could provide an astrosphere which encourages everyone to play sport. For instance, my hometown holds up the running race every year. People who win the first place would be invited to the television program. My cousin, one of the champions, had worked hard for it, including keeping running everyday, and doing other exercise to enhance his sporting ability. My cousin had a serious disease at his young age. After his hard working to do sport, he is becoming increasingly healthy. Thus, holding more sport events could make people exercise a lot. Certainly, more exercises make people more healthy.
Aside from stimulating the desire of doing sport, an in-depth reason, perhaps just as significant is that holding more sport events could help people make more friends. On the contemporary, more and more people have their own interest. Depending on a study from the University of Tokyo, 97-percent students claim that they have made friends from taking part in sport activities. This is because the people who attend the same race usually share the same topic. At least they love the same sport. I meet my best friends while playing basketball as a member of my school team, and we usually watch the NBA after school. On the contrary, assume that there is no basketball race hold, I would never meet him.
Admittedly, a minority of people tend to believe that spending more money in support of the art could enhance people's ability of appreciating artworks. Nevertheless, if we could analyze this issue from a different perspective, we could find they have oversimplified the fact that the people who love the art are less than crazy for sport. Almost everybody could join sport events and have fun. But they may have no ability of comprehending the meaning of artworks. Holding sport events could make more people enjoy.
I would like to reiterate that the cost of holding sport events should not less than supporting the art. If there is anyone who still wonders whether holding sport events could stimulate the desire of doing sports, and anyone who still doubts that holding more sport events could help people make more friends, and anyone who still argues that holding sport events could make more people enjoy, this essay would be my response.
Today, a prevalent statement we often see is that more money should be spent in supporting the art rather than cultivating athletics and holding sport events. This is because the arts could make people relax and enhance the ability of appreciating artworks. Opponents, however, argue that the supporting of sport events values a lot. The cost of cultivating athletics should not be less than supporting the art. As far as I am concerned, the latter view seems align more with my perspective. Three reasons would suffice here to support my perspective.
To begin with, holding sport events could stimulate people's desire of doing sport. Specifically, the majority of people tend to exercise more if the government could provide an astrosphere which encourages everyone to play sport. For instance, my hometown holds up the running race every year. People who win the first place would be invited to the television program. My cousin, one of the champions, had worked hard for it, including keeping running everyday, and doing other exercise to enhance his sporting ability. My cousin had a serious disease at his young age. After his hard working to do sport, he is becoming increasingly healthy. Thus, holding more sport events could make people exercise a lot. Certainly, more exercises make people more healthy.
Aside from stimulating the desire of doing sport, an in-depth reason, perhaps just as significant is that holding more sport events could help people make more friends. On the contemporary, more and more people have their own interest. Depending on a study from the University of Tokyo, 97-percent students claim that they have made friends from taking part in sport activities. This is because the people who attend the same race usually share the same topic. At least they love the same sport. I meet my best friends while playing basketball as a member of my school team, and we usually watch the NBA after school. On the contrary, assume that there is no basketball race hold, I would never meet him.
Admittedly, a minority of people tend to believe that spending more money in support of the art could enhance people's ability of appreciating artworks. Nevertheless, if we could analyze this issue from a different perspective, we could find they have oversimplified the fact that the people who love the art are less than crazy for sport. Almost everybody could join sport events and have fun. But they may have no ability of comprehending the meaning of artworks. Holding sport events could make more people enjoy.
I would like to reiterate that the cost of holding sport events should not less than supporting the art. If there is anyone who still wonders whether holding sport events could stimulate the desire of doing sports, and anyone who still doubts that holding more sport events could help people make more friends, and anyone who still argues that holding sport events could make more people enjoy, this essay would be my response.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 453, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... hard for it, including keeping running everyday, and doing other exercise to enhance hi...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, thus, while, at least, for instance, on the contrary, to begin with, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2492.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 494.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04453441296 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53956223029 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453441295547 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 755.1 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.2247276169 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9310344828 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0344827586 23.4991977007 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.89655172414 5.21951772744 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 10.2758426966 234% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.477563344495 0.243740707755 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140985899123 0.0831039109588 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.153341984887 0.0758088955206 202% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.313976348011 0.150359130593 209% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.182643798647 0.0667264976115 274% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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