Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products, is opening its next franchise in the town of Plainsville. The store should prove to be very successful: Nature's Way franchises tend to be most profitable in areas where residents lead healthy lives, and clearly Plainsville is such an area. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Finally, Plainsville's schoolchildren represent a new generation of potential customers: these schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness-for-life program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The notion that Nature's Way would be profitable in Plainsville may seem cogent at first glance. The arguer suggests that the areas which lead healthy lives like Plainsville also make Nature's Way success and the health clubs have more people. At the same time, the students may also buy their products. However, these conclusions are filled up with assumptions and logical mistakes. Three reasons would suffice to support my opinion.
To begin with, the arguer incorrectly concluded the Plainsville would response like other area. However, residents of different area develop various habits. It is hard to deny the possibility that the product of Nature's Way could not satisfy the local people. Worse than, if the local stores have a large consumer base and people all believe the product of them. Nature's Way would have a hard time when competing with these stores. Hence, more evidence could be demanded to prove the validity of this conclusion.
Moreover, the arguer fails to assume that the large number of people in clubs could bring more customers. Nonetheless, no evidence is provided to prove the Plainsville have a similar population with other areas. It is equally possible that the large population or rather short of clubs makes the number of members seem large. At the same time, the arguer fails to substantiate the validity of the number of clubs. They may just take part in for other reasons but never come to exercise. Therefore, more persuasive evidence is needed to robust the arguer;s point.
Finally, even if the assumptions above are true, the arguer still fails to assume that these schoolchildren could bring them benefits. Because schoolchildren have no reliable income to support their life, they could never be the main customers. If their parents make them focus on studying, the less time would be left to do sport. At the same time, students may prefer game more rather than sport. Therefore, it is necessary to reconsider the living condition and living style of local students.
To sum up, the argument is less persuasive than seem. The opinion that Nature's Way would be profitable also untenable. More correspond information is needed to support the arguer's assumptions and rule out other explanations.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 368 350
No. of Characters: 1827 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.38 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.965 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.531 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 121 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.72 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.025 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.72 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.29 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.478 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.087 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, nonetheless, so, still, therefore, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1888.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 367.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14441416894 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59779221232 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.49591280654 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.8473053892 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.8298636169 57.8364921388 41% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.52 119.503703932 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.68 23.324526521 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144166290545 0.218282227539 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0424065177538 0.0743258471296 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585579292618 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0940225256216 0.128457276422 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529468932152 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.3799401198 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 48.3550499002 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 12.197005988 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.94 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 12.3882235529 44% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.1389221557 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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