"We recommend that Monarch Books open a cafe in its store.Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the cafe would attract more customers. Space could be made for the cafe by discontinuing the children's book section,which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a cafe will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own cafe."
The notion that a cafe in monarch books may seem cogent to compete well with regal books. At the same time, the argument also seems valid at first glance. Nonetheless, this argument is filled up with assumptions and logical mistakes. Three reasons would suffice to support my opinion.
To begin with, the arguer assume that a large customer base could help attract more customers. Though it is credible, the arguer fails to provide enough evidence to substantiate this assumption. it is hard to deny the possibility that the major customers of monarch books are busy, they have no spare time to relax themselves in a cafe. In this case, the large base of customers helps little to the cafe. Hence, the argument has deficiencies unless the possible scenarios could be precluded.
Moreover, the arguer incorrectly concluded that taking up the children's book section's space could influence little. it is fair to question the validity of the national census. The lake of evidence could not support the census is disinterested. The professors may conclude something wrong to acquire other benefits. At the same time, we could not believe the national census would also make sense in one bookstore. Therefore, more persuasive evidence is needed to robust the arguer's assumption.
Finally, even if all assumptions above are true, the arguer still fails to provide any scientific evidence nor anecdotal evidence to prove the reliability that new cafe could take a prior place in the competition with regal books'. Let alone the cancled children's book section may disappoint the customers who mainly buy books for their kids. The cost of a new cafe would also provide economic pressure. These factors may make the bookstore more depressed. Worse than, if the new cafe could not bring more benefits, monarch book would hard to compete with Refal books in many conditions.
To sum up, the argument is less persuasive than it seems, for the lack of evidence to assist the arguer's assumptions. In order to rule out other possible explanations, it is necessary to glean more correspond information.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 343 350
No. of Characters: 1703 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.304 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.965 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.597 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.062 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.298 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.515 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.044 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 197, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...idence to substantiate this assumption. it is hard to deny the possibility that th...
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Line 5, column 117, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... sections space could influence little. it is fair to question the validity of the...
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Line 5, column 475, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arguers'' or 'arguer's'?
Suggestion: arguers'; arguer's
...uasive evidence is needed to robust the arguers assumption. Finally, even if all assu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, hence, if, may, moreover, nonetheless, so, still, therefore, well, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1749.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 343.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09912536443 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68707570861 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542274052478 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.6884141369 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.5 119.503703932 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5909090909 23.324526521 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13636363636 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203383816572 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560313037709 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588244363875 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111057065985 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498964726802 0.0628817314937 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.