.The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The notion that empolying people who sleep less would have higher profit may seem cogent at first glance. Because the study shows the performance of worker with a shorter sleep would act better in some aspects. Nonewithstand, this argument is filled up with assumptions and logical mistakes. Three reasons would suffice to support that idea.
To begin with, the arguer incorrectly assumes that the sleep with the same period provides the same outcome. Specifically, there are abundance evidence shows the deep sleep could bring more benefits and make people energitic. Therefore, it is equally possible that deep sleep take a more significant place in making sure the extraordinary performing rather than sleep less. This factor may also act as a main cause of faster growth. Hence, the more evidence is needed to preclude that explanation.
Moreover, the arguer fails to claim that sleeping less would bring all good feedback. However, a well performance is decided by many aspects. That survey only provide the evidence of higher profit margins and faster prowth. At the same time,they may become more careless and less energitic. This approach would not bring too much benefits than assumed. The arguer is necessary to glean more information to make sure how their live going in all aspects rather than some specific ones.
Finally, even if the assumtions above are true, the arguer still fails to assume that all people sleep less could perform exceptional. Individuals are different. Employing could not simply depend on the sleep time without concerning working skills and education background. At the same time, a specific people who sleep less may not act as assumption, performing normally or even worse. So judging employing by according sleep time only seems unfair.
To sum up, the argument is less cogent than seems, for the lack of evidence to support assumptions . In order to rule out other explanations, it is essential to collect more information.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 319 350
No. of Characters: 1606 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.226 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.034 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.494 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.141 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.287 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.496 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.035 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 108, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...profit may seem cogent at first glance. Because the study shows the performance of work...
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Line 9, column 241, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , they
...gins and faster prowth. At the same time,they may become more careless and less energ...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 326, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...itic. This approach would not bring too much benefits than assumed. The arguer is ne...
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Line 17, column 99, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... lack of evidence to support assumptions . In order to rule out other explanations...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1667.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 318.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24213836478 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63017063791 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553459119497 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.8473053892 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.3294581728 57.8364921388 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.7727272727 119.503703932 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4545454545 23.324526521 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95454545455 5.70786347227 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0605666244878 0.218282227539 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0186783719924 0.0743258471296 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0228894203362 0.0701772020484 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0347156186045 0.128457276422 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0209965958761 0.0628817314937 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 48.3550499002 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 12.197005988 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.52 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.1389221557 68% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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