The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argumenet that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night the author have is base on the unfounded assumptions. Although if a person decide to sleep less than 6 hours, he/she might find more time to do more work, it is impossible to ensure that the businss he/she is working on will prosper.
First of all, the author mentions a study indicates a association between the average number of hours they sleep per night and the success of their firms. The author assums that the study about 300 advertising executives will beable to provide a firm support to the argument. However, this study might hardly reflect the situation due to the insufficient number of people who are inteviewd. What is more, it is possible that the average sleeping time reported from the subject may be less than what they actually have since it is very hard to keep track one person's sleeping time without a professional monitoring device.
Second, the author assums that the reason why the company is successful it is because their executives sleep less than others. However it is possibe that the company is simply have a better management system. It is also likely that the companys employees are more efficient than other company's employee. The executives sleep less is because the company is so successful that they have to spend extra hours to complete their managieral task.
Third, even if we assume that the executives with less sleeping will help the company's success, the assumption that such condition will apply to every employees is unreasonable. It is common sense that the manager and individual contributer will have very different task and responsibilities. While the manager may require to spend long ours to attending the managerial bussiness, it is possible that efficiency is most important aspect for a individual contributer.
What is more, the assumption that it is possible to hire people entirely base on the average sleep time is unwanted. There is simply no means an human resource manager will beable to use to verify the accuracy of the average sleep time the candidate provide with the normal interview and hiring procedure. It is also illegal and impractical to ask an candidate to reduce the sleeping time so that he/she can work long hours.
In summary, assumptions the author provides to support the argument that a company should only hire people sleep less than six hours per night is all prove unwanted.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The argumenet that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night the author have is base on the unfounded assumptions.
Error: argumenet Suggestion: argument
Sentence: Although if a person decide to sleep less than 6 hours, he/she might find more time to do more work, it is impossible to ensure that the businss he/she is working on will prosper.
Error: businss Suggestion: business
Sentence: The author assums that the study about 300 advertising executives will beable to provide a firm support to the argument.
Error: assums Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: beable Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: However, this study might hardly reflect the situation due to the insufficient number of people who are inteviewd.
Error: inteviewd Suggestion: interview
Sentence: What is more, it is possible that the average sleeping time reported from the subject may be less than what they actually have since it is very hard to keep track one person's sleeping time without a professional monitoring device.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Second, the author assums that the reason why the company is successful it is because their executives sleep less than others.
Error: assums Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: However it is possibe that the company is simply have a better management system.
Error: possibe Suggestion: possible
Sentence: The executives sleep less is because the company is so successful that they have to spend extra hours to complete their managieral task.
Error: managieral Suggestion: manager
Sentence: It is common sense that the manager and individual contributer will have very different task and responsibilities.
Error: contributer Suggestion: contribute
Sentence: While the manager may require to spend long ours to attending the managerial bussiness, it is possible that efficiency is most important aspect for a individual contributer.
Error: contributer Suggestion: contribute
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: bussiness Suggestion: business
Sentence: There is simply no means an human resource manager will beable to use to verify the accuracy of the average sleep time the candidate provide with the normal interview and hiring procedure.
Error: beable Suggestion: No alternate word
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 423 350
No. of Characters: 2030 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.535 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.799 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.575 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.882 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.21 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.824 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.637 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.142 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 53, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
..., the author mentions a study indicates a association between the average number ...
^
Line 5, column 373, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ue to the insufficient number of people who are inteviewd. What is more, it is possible...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 128, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...heir executives sleep less than others. However it is possibe that the company is simpl...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 177, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...t is possibe that the company is simply have a better management system. It is also ...
^^^^
Line 13, column 324, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'spending'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: spending
...bilities. While the manager may require to spend long ours to attending the managerial b...
^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 442, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...efficiency is most important aspect for a individual contributer. What is m...
^
Line 17, column 143, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...e is unwanted. There is simply no means an human resource manager will beable to u...
^^
Line 17, column 184, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...n human resource manager will beable to use to verify the accuracy of the average s...
^^^
Line 17, column 349, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... is also illegal and impractical to ask an candidate to reduce the sleeping time s...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, third, while, in summary, first of all, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 420.0 441.139720559 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97380952381 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63447727672 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459523809524 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1933706815 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.882352941 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7058823529 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47058823529 5.70786347227 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176228158408 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0638838232691 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621435636056 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0941254513128 0.128457276422 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606783667304 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4 Out of 6
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