Too many young people these days are unhealthy and / or overweight. What advice would you give
somebody who wanted to become fit and healthy?
Teen obesity is common nowadays and causes many severe diseases in a later stage. Young people often neglect the overweight and continue sedentary life without eating habits or diets. No one can deny that there are ways in which overweight youngsters can avoid that problem and I will provide explanation in the following essay.
First to begin with, teens should make exercises regularly in order to keep their bodies fit and good health conditions. It is scientifically proved that the physical exertion helps regulate blood pressure and maintain body fats. Moreover, visiting a gym in a weekly basis not only prevents from overweight that can instigate illnesses, but also contributes for attaining slender and fit body. My little brother had a little more weight than usual for kids in his age and I took drastic measures to prevent him form further obesity with consequences. Therefore, I took him to a sport center where he can take up swimming in order to shape his muscles and do aerobic activity. At the beginning my little shy brother was not very happy to go alone and that's why I accompanied him. I killed two birds with one stone, while I was going with my brother to make him feel confident and calm I also used the equipment at the gym to keep my fit as well.
Furthermore, young people can change their eating habits to prevent obesity and unhealthiness. By cutting down on sugars and fatty comestibles they will balance their cholesterol with is a main factor for people's health condition. There is no shortage of opinion that kids especially are addicted to junk food because they are tasty and turn on the receptors. However, there are many other delicious foods containing fiber and sufficient amount of proteins and carbs which are healthy as well and young people should consume them more often. For instance my dad had a high cholesterol 3 years ago and a doctor told him to give up eating carbs. Then he went on a balanced diet without eating bread, also started an active life. Every Sunday morning he makes jogging in nearby park and now he feels more energized.
In a nutshell, young overweight people should undertake immediate actions to prevent eating disorders and more severe implications. Exercises and a balanced diet are beneficial to young people as it can make them slim and healthy, therefore I believe that should turn into a lifestyle.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...ther was not very happy to go alone and thats why I accompanied him. I killed two bir...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, while, for instance, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1973.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85960591133 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61919032817 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581280788177 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.6912085816 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.842105263 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3684210526 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52631578947 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114417342499 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0365716501156 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0384036798859 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0813219731214 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285931523198 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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