I completely agree with the statement that the social activities and sports in college campus are ever the less important than the classes and libraries and like the library and educational classes, sports, and other social activities should get equal funds and appreciation from the Universities or from the funding bodies. There is following reason why I feel like this, which I shall explain in the following essay.
To begin with the, Sports and social activities are equally important like other educational modules. In modern educational system, they are incorporated with the traditional teaching system, which helps in the development of the students. There is a famous coat that “healthy body contains a healthy brain”, which is necessary for the studies. In my case, when I was in my school, there were less funds was available for the sports and social activities and at that time only 65% students were qualified in the board examination. After that, our school committee decided to increase the budget of sport and social activities. Thereafter, they did a pilot study, and they got the surprising result. Our school was in the top list of the qualifying students, there were 96% students were qualified and the result was constant from that year to till now. This example clearly shows that the how sports and social activities affect the academic career of the students.
Secondly, these kinds of activities are involved in the personality development. It has a huge impact in the student social as well as on communication skill. Government and school funding bodies always should focus on these aspects of these activities and try to provide the adequate amount of fund to the school and universities. Here, I would like to give an example of one of my friend. In school days, he was shy and introvert, was unable to communicate with other classmates. Later on, our sport teacher introduced him with cricket game, initially, he had very tough time in the game, especially with his teammates, but after one year, he was totally changed. He became the captain of the team, now he was friendly with other students. This activity had a very strong impact on his life, and nowadays he is working in a pharmaceutical company and leading team of 34 members.
In conclusion, I would like to say that sports and social activities are the important part of education as well as social learning. It affects student’s life at large scale. For the proper development of the students, it is necessary to invest the equal amount of fund in sport and in social activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, secondly, so, well, as to, i feel, in conclusion, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2167.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00461893764 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81683631543 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484988452656 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.5143992562 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.19047619 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.619047619 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38095238095 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198461952541 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0603463813332 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662938867818 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150640614902 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0712288178335 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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