We are living in a technologically- dependent world and smartphones is a part of the modern society. In this world of globalization and modernization, there is no shortage of debate whether it is better for young children to have phone or not. Some parents believe that it is a good idea to give young generation mobile phones. However, I believe that smartphones should not be handed to young people. I will try to examine below the specific reasons for my viewpoint.
To begin with, with smartphones and Internet, kids can have access to wide range of things: good and bad. Young children are like sponges, they learn very quickly whatever they see and hear. Today, with the Internet-enabled phone we reach to the Websites which are not actually meant for children, and accidentally kids open the browser not particular for their age. Even though it’s a great way to communicate with kids when they are away, but it also brings many disadvantages like watching porn sites which are not suitable for kids. My nephew, who just started high school has a smartphone, and he feels extremely proud of it. However, while giving the phone my cousins never thought of the negative consequences. Both my brother and sister-in-law have a full-time job, they thought to give a smartphone to my niece will keep their mind at ease, as they can talk to him whenever they want. 6 months later, one day they were looking at the browsing history and found out that he watches porn sites at this tender age. As a result of this indulgence, they were very regretful about their decision.
Moreover, I believe smartphones causes a huge distraction for school-going kids. Students go to schools for studies, but with smartphones, they spent most of their time on social-networking sites like Facebook and Instagram. Not only this, recently I was reading the article in a major newspaper, where it was mentioned that recent study shows that kids who start using phones at an early age become introvert as they don’t communicate with anyone in the class. They keep themselves busy on the phone. While in past, when kids did not have phones, they were more interactive and outgoing as compare to today’s generation. I have witnessed this drawback in my nephew. When I visit my cousin's place, my nephew is always busy playing games on the phone or watching videos rather than talking. According to me, this is a significant downside of using mobiles at an early age. This is the time when kids should talk about various things, should discuss their likes and dislikes rather than keeping themselves engage on phone.
All in all, if all the factors are contemplated, I can say definitely there are some benefits of having smartphones, but it does not outweigh the negative repercussions. Smartphones destroy the communication among peers, and also, they indulge in a habit which is not right for their age.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 231, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'phoned'.
Suggestion: phoned
...it is better for young children to have phone or not. Some parents believe that it is...
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Line 5, column 514, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...eep themselves busy on the phone. While in past, when kids did not have phones, they we...
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Line 5, column 801, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...or watching videos rather than talking. According to me, this is a significant downside of usin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, look, moreover, so, while, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2419.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 491.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9266802444 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84296855542 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535641547862 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 741.6 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7763016922 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.76 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.64 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.48 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0539580235553 0.236089414692 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0161225684797 0.076458572812 21% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.018530684513 0.0737576698707 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0300183156322 0.150856017488 20% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0201693576547 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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