There is no doubt in my mind that famous celebrities have a great influence on people's life. However, does it influence younger generation more than the older? Everyone has their own opinion about this. According to me, prominent entertainers and athletics have a profound effect on young people. I believe this for specific reasons which I will explain in the following essay.
To begin with, these days, teenagers are more involved in watching television and more active on social media than the people in the past. This is the biggest reason why young children are more influenced by famous personality. In the past, older people had limited access to advance technologies like television, computers. In contrast, nowadays, kids today have a world of technologies right at their fingertips. As a result, they can follow their favorite celebrity all the time and they have huge fan follower and their opinions matters to their fans. My own example demonstrates this concept, I follow a famous artist John Camry on social media and I am a huge fan of his arts. Two days back, I saw him on television volunteering with breast cancer awareness walk. I got so motivated that I followed his path and started community volunteer. My example is not an outlier, young generation like myself all over the world get inspired by the important figure whom they like.
In addition to it, young generations are open to ideas and suggestions whereas older people have spent their whole life following certain rules and regulations and they don't want to change. My grandfather is a convincing example what I am trying to say. My grandfather lived his life in a small town most of his life, but two years back we moved to an urban area, where we have all the available facilities and also modern technologies. Because of my busy schedule, I cook most of the food in a microwave and I don't see any harm in this. My grandfather is not happy the way food is cooked these days. He feels it has a deleterious effect on the health as he thinks it is generated by the electricity which is not good for human lives. Even though many times he had seen on the television microwaves and its advantages are endorsed by some famous celebrities. This example clearly shows older people are least affected by the opinions of the entertainers. In his view, it is a marketing strategy to sell the product rather than any beneficial effect.
All in all, I think modern generations are more affected by the views of the famous person. This is because older people had a very limited access to latest technologies so they are not open to the changes and adamant with their thoughts.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 35, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
There is no doubt in my mind that famous celebrities have a great influence on peoples life....
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Line 1, column 204, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...ryone has their own opinion about this. According to me, prominent entertainers and athletics h...
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Line 6, column 170, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... certain rules and regulations and they dont want to change. My grandfather is a con...
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Line 6, column 512, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...k most of the food in a microwave and I dont see any harm in this. My grandfather is...
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Line 6, column 840, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
...and its advantages are endorsed by some famous celebrities. This example clearly shows older peopl...
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Line 8, column 126, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[5]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'very limited access'.
Suggestion: very limited access
...erson. This is because older people had a very limited access to latest technologies so they are not ...
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Line 8, column 148, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'to the latest'.
Suggestion: to the latest
... older people had a very limited access to latest technologies so they are not open to th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, whereas, i think, in addition, in contrast, no doubt, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2203.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78913043478 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71799558499 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530434782609 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 701.1 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4761891978 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.12 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.32 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192573790724 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0541208737928 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0425785493662 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132593730001 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434503035536 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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