TPO-04 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Yesterday, owning a car was a prestige and status, today it is our necessity and for tomorrow, we are not certain what would be the situation about the use of cars. But looking at certain issues posed by the excessive use of cars like rising cost of automobiles, traffic and parking problems, shortage of fuel resources and air pollution, we can assume that there will be fewer cars on the roads in the next twenty years.
First, we can’t deny the importance of cars in today’s fast routine. Today, cars are very important in our daily life to reach to our destinations with the comfort. People travel a lot on weekends and holidays with their friends and family members. But, as today there are excessive automobiles on the roads, it brings serious traffic jam problems, so people spend lots of time on roads and may reach late at their destinations. A parking problem is also a major issue for any city planning authority nowadays. Moreover, costs of cars, repairing, maintenance and insurance of automobiles are not affordable by many families in the world. Hence, because of all these problems, people may think to use public transportation instead using their own cars.
Second, because of excessive use of automobiles right now, natural resources for gas and gasoline are consumed at a very fast rate, so in future,we may have potential energy crises in the world and scientists are working on renewable resources of automobile energy. Moreover, auto emissions are responsible for air pollution and global warming. Today, serious chronic respiratory problems like asthma and lung cancers have been increased suddenly. In these circumstances, it is wise to decrease the use of cars in our daily life.
Third, since the public transportation has improved, it is convenient to commute by an AC transit bus or a subway. Public transportation in the United States is a crucial part of the solution to the nation’s economic, energy, and environmental challenges - helping to bring a better quality of life. In increasing numbers, people are using public transportation and local communities are expanding public transit services. Every segment of American society - individuals, families, communities, and businesses - benefits from public transportation. .Public transportation, while maybe not as enjoyable as commuting in your own personal vehicle, does ease congestion, reduce emissions, and give you plenty of quality time to people watch, as well as get to know your "neighbors." In addition, public transportation allows you to relax, read or nap during that commute instead of fighting and stressing and feeling the road rage.
To sum up, although cars have served as comfortable and safe vehicles in our life, but overuse of cars have created certain above- mentioned problems, and hence as a part of its solution, plus an availability of the better public transport facilities, we may see fewer cars on the roads in the next twenty years.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
although cars have served as comfortable and safe vehicles in our life, but overuse...
Description: don't put 'although' 'but' in one sentence.
flaws:
Some subClauses wanted
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 25 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 481 350
No. of Characters: 2393 1500
No. of Different Words: 249 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.683 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.975 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.818 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.316 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.549 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.309 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.525 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Yesterday, owning a car was a prestige a...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on the roads in the next twenty years. First, we can't deny the import...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ortation instead using their own cars. Second, because of excessive use of ...
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Line 5, column 140, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ne are consumed at a very fast rate, so in future,we may have potential energy crises in ...
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Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , we
...nsumed at a very fast rate, so in future,we may have potential energy crises in the...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ase the use of cars in our daily life. Third, since the public transportati...
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Line 7, column 559, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... - benefits from public transportation. .Public transportation, while maybe not a...
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Line 7, column 560, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Public
...- benefits from public transportation. .Public transportation, while maybe not as enjo...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... stressing and feeling the road rage. To sum up, although cars have serve...
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Line 9, column 88, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mfortable and safe vehicles in our life, but overuse of cars have created certain...
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Line 9, column 167, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ain above- mentioned problems, and hence as a part of its solution, plus an avail...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'third', 'well', 'while', 'as to', 'in addition', 'as well as', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.283687943262 0.229887763892 123% => OK
Verbs: 0.122340425532 0.158761421928 77% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0992907801418 0.0866891130778 115% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0390070921986 0.046263068375 84% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0390070921986 0.0685040099705 57% => OK
Prepositions: 0.125886524823 0.118717715034 106% => OK
Participles: 0.0390070921986 0.0351676179071 111% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.07708658716 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0195035460993 0.0309702414327 63% => OK
Particles: 0.00177304964539 0.00188951952338 94% => OK
Determiners: 0.063829787234 0.0887237588012 72% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0141843971631 0.0209618222197 68% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00177304964539 0.0139019557991 13% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3033.0 2387.08602151 127% => OK
No of words: 483.0 408.028673835 118% => OK
Chars per words: 6.27950310559 5.86048508987 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.389233954451 0.338922669872 115% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.291925465839 0.251872472559 116% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.211180124224 0.174417080927 121% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.163561076605 0.112833075102 145% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07708658716 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546583850932 0.524397521467 104% => OK
Word variations: 66.2677071601 59.2087087015 112% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6684587814 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.4210526316 20.5533526081 124% => OK
Sentence length SD: 87.6902443113 48.84282405 180% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.631578947 120.699889404 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4210526316 20.5533526081 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.894736842105 0.644075263715 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.54480286738 198% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 54.6135992154 45.7405998639 119% => OK
Elegance: 2.2389380531 1.45489161554 154% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284222661709 0.300154397459 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.10379003075 0.103427244359 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0672616437215 0.0752933317313 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.510722745052 0.497263757937 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.208614645934 0.151897553556 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108512950848 0.114077575197 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0607713925864 0.0781384742642 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.357357187003 0.336927656856 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.07632285538 0.067059652881 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196665946957 0.210909579961 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341684094719 0.0618886996521 55% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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