In today's life, people are preoccupied with their work. They barely find time to enjoy their lives. Even though, some people think that nowadays people are spending much time on personal enjoyment rather than doing what they should do. Personally, I disagree with this idea for the following reasons.
To begin with, Who has the authority to decide what the people should do in their lives? In other words, maybe what I should do is exactly what I enjoyed. Furthermore, researchers have been proven that people who spend some of their time doing activities they like are more likely to show better performance in their work. However, most of the young adult prefer to work in the field they are interested in, so, they can hit two birds with one stone, since they will do their work, and at the same time, in the way they like. For, instance, musicians spend most of their time singing or listening to music. But actually, this is what they should do, due to the fact that this is their real work. In addition, video game developers usually spend most of their time playing or watching this kind of games; they do this because simply this is their job in the first place, but at the same time they have fun while doing what they should do. So, this topic is subjective, and no one can make a clear cut-point regarding this issue.
Secondly, most of the nation who believe that the recent generations are wasting their time doing unimportant things rather than invest it in better things are in fact cannot provide any evidence to support their claims. On the other hand, most of the teens, nowadays, have a part-time job in order to offer for their tuition fees. Nonetheless, with the prominent acceleration of the number of the graduate every year, and the limitation of the job opportunity, people tend to put an extra effort on the work in order to secure their position. And because they spend most of their time working, some of them invent methods to have fun while they are doing their jobs. For example, one of my friends who was working as a Sales Representative in a reputable company lost his job during the economic crisis that attacks my country in the last year. At that time the company reduced the number of the employee to counter the losses in its profits. and due to the fact that my friend was always preoccupied with social events and rarely do his work as it should be, he was vulnerable to losing his job, and that what actually happened. Thus, he learned an invaluable lesson from that event. So, later on, when he was hired by another company, he decided to do his work in his own way. Thus, he used to organize social events and invite the customers to these events where he represents the product for them. By the end, both the customers and my friend was glad. consequently, the profits of the company have been raised to a large extent. Accordingly, my friend has gained multiple promotions. And again, this emphasizes the fact that people can have personal enjoyment through their works.
In conclusion, a smart person can bring joy to his work, and that does not necessarily mean that he is incompetent in his job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: And
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Suggestion: Consequently
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nonetheless, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, in other words, to begin with, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 43.0788530466 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2597.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 560.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6375 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.8645985582 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37581283083 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476785714286 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 788.4 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.7732717885 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1851851852 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7407407407 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.85185185185 5.45110844103 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321610092859 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0975866167727 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106015797775 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220933073665 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.147135816167 0.0645574589148 228% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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