TPO-09 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Recently, technlology has improved unacceptable which gets life easier for many ways. specially, with computers people could do every kind of jobs without any effort with less time. Mobile phones are getting more aplication day by day. Before only twenty years, it was just dream to speak with face to face on phone. However, specially for children, tecnology does not impact always in the positive direction, sometimes has made them less imaginetive than they were in the past. I completely support that this idea is true for several reason which state following sentences.
To begin with, tecnology offers unnumerable opportunities for not only children also adults. For instance, I have a younger brouther twelve years has every tecnologic staff such as computer, mobile phone. He spends all his time with these to play, wacht something or listen to music. Whereas, before we bought them he was playing game with his friends, asking what we are doing. When I was just 8 years, I did not have any of tecnologic material and I was playing with clay and building houses, some staff for home. I was building water chanels and moving on water, I was able to give the slope for chanels.
Another reason why I agree with the above statement is that, children do not need to resecerh on the information or what they are corious which could get more information with easy way. However, this makes chilren lazy which lead to them if they have had huge problems to solve, they do not able to deal with them. to illusrate it, in the future some jobs needs creative such as engineering or architecture. When they face to some trouble, they look to computer, however, computers does not always figure out defects that cope with own imaginative.
Last but not least, mobile phone's game are just ready code, and children end of these games after several trying. İf children are able to make their own toys, they could have self-confidence and which could lead to them face every harsh problems simple.
İn concluasion, ı utterly belive that tecnology has getting childrens less inventive than before is a valid argument owing to reasons that ı explained above. The less tecnology, the more creative. İf everthing is prepared, people do not have to consider about it which allows people final results without brain storm.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 87, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Specially
...e which gets life easier for many ways. specially, with computers people could do every k...
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Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put before the verb 'impact'.
Suggestion: always impact
...cially for children, tecnology does not impact always in the positive direction, sometimes ha...
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Line 1, column 529, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'several reasons'.
Suggestion: several reasons
...tely support that this idea is true for several reason which state following sentences. To be...
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Line 2, column 93, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ties for not only children also adults. For instance, I have a younger brouther ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
...ve, they do not able to deal with them. to illusrate it, in the future some jobs n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, whereas, for instance, kind of, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1925.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91071428571 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49094439679 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561224489796 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4098132625 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.6666666667 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.19047619048 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186681495067 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543187543519 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512967414158 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106142461529 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569520255236 0.0645574589148 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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