TPO-11 - Independent Writing Task Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to support you

The current emerging trend, the technology play a vital role in human needs and most of the time we cannot imagine a day without using technology. Especially, there are many advantages to use internet over the disadvantage. Although it is not ideal for everyone. Some people believe the internet is a valuable resource and contribute a variety of the information to the society and other not. In my view, although the internet having the few uncensored browsing sites, overall it is benefited to the society because it gives instant access to information and a communication.
To begin with, the internet allows browsing a variety of information such as searching for school admissions for children's and the shopping. If we google it on the internet, we get a plenty of the schools with reviews and rating, those help us to select the best school for students. In addition to that people can buy the variety of goods from the comfort of their home. For example, recently I buy a television through Amazon online website and it was a pretty easy procedure. In fact, I got the delivery very next day. In contrast, in the past days, people apply manually for school admission and we don't have enough information about that institution before we join. On the other hand people from the past, they had to go shopping in a traditional way to buy goods. Sometimes it is difficult for them to spend a lot of time shopping.
In addition to access to the information, the internet is a revolutionized communication. It makes easy for people to communicate with each other. We keep in touch by email or instant messenger. Moreover, the video message is becoming common for business people because they can attend any kind of the meeting without traveling and it saves a lot of time. On the other hand, people from the old days they communicate with letters. It takes a time to reach the receiver even in the critical position. For example, recently I got an opportunity to attend the most famous motivational lecture and it was online. Initially, I was not sure how it could be but when I attend that program, I felt like I sat in front of the speaker even though it is a video conference. I don't think so, it is possible without the internet.
In conclusion, Even though few people, especially teenagers are attracted to unwanted programs on the internet, overall it is good for the society to make people better connect and to give a huge amount of the facilities to the society.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, such as, in my view, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1613.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82934131737 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8633291098 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541916167665 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5440661991 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8823529412 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6470588235 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82352941176 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178417633059 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0576488118757 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586344123523 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102709964831 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364506513835 0.0645574589148 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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