TPO 11 - Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?
There is no doubt that new technologies play a decisive role in every individual's life.in this regard some people are inclined toward the opinion that Internet provide extremely useful information in different area of our lives whereas others hold exactly opposite perspective, believing that this information is not always valid and beneficial. From my vantage point, it will be extremely profitable to use information which is provided by Internet since in this way, we will be able to saving our time, improve our public knowledge and extended our social lives. In the following paragraph I will elaborate on my perspectives.
One of the reasons that immediately comes to mind is that valid information which is available in the Internet helps us to save our time and do our tasks fast. For example, I was looking for appropriate job positions after I had finished my college. I did not know for which I was qualified and in which I was interested, so I started to surf in the Internet and get information about job positions which was related to my major .In this regard, I found very practical websites that introduced job positions, their requirements and salaries.by using this information, I found my favorite career with high salary in my town's vicinity. In fact, the information help both employers and employees to save their time for finding each other.
Another equally important reason is that people develop their public knowledge by use of the Internet. That is to say, authentic information in the Internet increases their knowledge in public area such as sports, history and health. before the advent of computer and Internet we had not access to all resources like magazines, books and newspapers or this accessibilities were expensive and time consuming .but nowadays we access to libraries, free online magazines and encyclopedias freely and fast. for example, imagine the situation in which you want to gain information about fitness. you write in search engine like Google and then you find several websites in related to fitness. You easily read the articles or watch movies which describe a method and approach which help you to be more healthy. therefore the internet improve our public information by providing authentic resources.
the last but not the least reason is that the internet gives us the information by which we are able to communicate with other people and enhance our social life. This means that reliable information in the Internet, linked people together with same social perspectives so that they joint to teams or groups and share their desires. To clarify this, take the Facebook for instance, in this website, you can find your favorite social activities or individuals. For example, I found native English speaker who wants to learn Persian language, now we are teaching our native languages to each other and furthermore we sometimes talk about our traditions and cultures. this helps both of us to communicate with our people when we go to our each other's countries and to be familiar with our societies. accordingly, by using internet, we develop social skills and relationships.
To wrap it up, I deeply believe that the Internet provides useful information about every aspects of our lives which eliminate time consuming deeds, facilitate our social relationships and strengthen individual's public knowledge.so new technologies are invented to develop our lives' convenience but the ways which we utilize them are significant concerns.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, furthermore, if, look, so, then, therefore, whereas, for example, for instance, in fact, no doubt, such as, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.0286738351 227% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 83.0 43.0788530466 193% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2938.0 1977.66487455 149% => OK
No of words: 566.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19081272085 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87757670434 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88277725029 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489399293286 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 940.5 618.680645161 152% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.3591344731 48.9658058833 193% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.904761905 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9523809524 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234295406068 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0800044787574 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514876025258 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136519191014 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461294885405 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 86.8835125448 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.5 10.002688172 205% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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