TPO 15 independent writing Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In order to become financially responsible adults children should learn to manage their own money at a young age

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TPO 15 independent writing-Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.

Having a correct attitude on money is related to the quality of our lives. Many parents believe that children don’t know how to manage money. Therefore, they will take away their lucky money from Chinese New Year to avoid kids wasting it. However, in my opinion, parents should train their children on managing their own money at a young age. In the ensuing essay, my perspective will be substantiated by underlying reasons.

First of all, people’s value system on money is built when ones are young. The way we spend our money is highly related to how we spend money in the future. For example, I used to spend all my allowance every month. I had never had an idea to save it like my sister, who tend to save a little money each month. Until now, my sister and I are earning money for ourselves but the way we spend money have never changed. We all know that it is safe to have some saving, and not to waste money on things we don’t really need. However, It’s very difficult for me to change the way on managing money which I learnt as a kid.

Secondly, children can have more choices of their life if they can control their own money. To take myself as an example. When I was in elementary school, I don’t have my own money. When I want to buy anything, I have to discuss with my parents to let them allow me to. Accordingly, I can’t decide which clothes I want to buy or which places I want to go with my friends. Besides, sometimes parents don’t realize what are popular among children and what children want. If I can have dominance of my own life as children, I believe my childhood can be happier.

Last but not least, learning how to manage money can assist children on making choices in limited sources. With limited money, children should find out what they really want to spend money on and to sacrifice things they can’t afford. It is a very good training for children on weighting the pros and cons.

In conclusion, I believe that children should have chances on managing their money at a young age because it will influence their value of money, their position of control and their ability on decision making.

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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, besides, but, first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1772.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54358974359 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34646067771 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474358974359 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.2224663022 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.0434782609 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9565217391 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21739130435 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222161734463 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0740383557588 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0774140411041 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160984758327 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0656083703326 0.0645574589148 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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