TPO 18
Nowadays, the status of teachers is less regarding than before because of several reasons such as progressing the technology. However, depending on personality type and emotional concern, people might have different opinions about this subject. As far as I am concerned, I agree that students are more influenced by their friends than by their teachers because they spend more time of day with friends and they have close contact with their friends rather than the other people.
Spending the time, which is the most momentous fact, is the first reason of current discussion. In this regard, it should be noted that a person whether a male or female, are more influenced by a person who spends most of the time with each other. In other words, two persons that being together from morning until night, will have idea and notions in different issues and thus can affect easily to each other. Todays, students are with their friends more time than with their teachers, so they are more influenced by their friends. For instance, my brother had a nice friend that spent most of his time with each other when they were young. My brother helped his friend whenever he had a problem, and vice versa. They both interested in music lessons. My brother was enough skill in mathematic too. In the decision for the future career, even though his teacher advised him to continue his mathematic issues but my brother decided to be a musician rather than a teacher because of his friend. Therefore, one reason that students are more influenced by friends is about the spending more time with friends.
Another noteworthy reason of ongoing discussion is about having a close connection with friends rather than others. In this case, it sounds logical to say that students are more influenced by people who knows the secret issues about them. Imagine a student who has a friend to tells any issues of life to him and feels relax beside of him. The student talks about the problems that he never talked before with anyone. For example, I can vividly remember when I was a teenager, I had a close friend for many years. One day I fall in love with an attractive girl and my friend, as well as my teacher, were the only persons who knew that relationship. After a while, I faced a problem in my relationship. I got advise both of them how to solve this problem but I applied my friend's advice because he knew my detail issues of relationship. Hence, having a profound connection is another reason that I disagree with above statement.
From what has been discussed, we may finally reach the conclusion that students are more affected by friends than their teachers because of the time which they spend with friends and the close communication that they have with friends. It should be noted that there are few students that feel convenient with their teachers rather than others.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, such as, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2377.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 495.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80202020202 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46045843879 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450505050505 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 717.3 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2974954288 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0416666667 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.625 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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