TPO 18 independent writing: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
People are easy to be influenced when their mentalities aren’t fully developed. Researchers are always discovering what make people become who they are. With this in mind, a controversy exists as to whether our friends or teachers influence us more when we are students. As far as I am concerned, I totally agree that friends influence us more through our growing processes than teachers do. In the ensuing essay, my perspective will be substantiated by underlying reasons.
First of all, people who we spend a lot of time being with affect us more, and we stay with our friends longer than with our teachers. My own experience demonstrates this concept. I studied in a boarding school when I was in high school. My classmates were also my roommates, which means we spent almost 24 hours a day together. Within 2 to 3 years, my friends and I became similar with each other on not only the way we speak, but also our how we think. That is to say, our friends, due to we spent so much time together, can affect our point of views and behaviors.
Furthermore, peers pressure influences our behaviors. Students are competing but searching for acceptance among their peers at the same time. If one were acting differently, one would feel left out by the group, then pressure increases. To take myself for an example. When I was in eighth grade, I had to study for my senior high school entry exam. I was at difficulty controlling my own time because I don’t know how to say no to my friends when they all wanted to go somewhere and invited me together. Then, I had to stay up late during the night studying, even though my teachers told us that it is unhealthy and have negative effect to our study.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that one’s peers influence our behavior than one’s teachers do.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 194, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...With this in mind, a controversy exists as to whether our friends or teachers influence us mo...
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Line 7, column 100, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ce our behavior than one’s teachers do.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, then, as to, in conclusion, first of all, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1493.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65109034268 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70141422295 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591900311526 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.5838966819 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.5789473684 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8947368421 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175669613337 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0551953144662 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706896511999 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12677815017 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680075535284 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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