TPO 18 integrated
agree or not. students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
Students are ready to accept whatever they hear from their close friends and teachers, mainly because they are in a period in which they want to be accepted by the society and build a personality for themselves. There are mutually exclusive notions regarding whether students follow their friends' ideas more or their teachers'. In my point of view, I am inclined to the latter opinion in spite of the fact that the former has more aficionados among adults. My answer to this bone of contention is twofold, and in the following, the rationale behind it will be elaborated by the most outstanding, solid proofs.
The first and foremost reason which is worth mentioning is that students see their teachers as their role models and heros; they imagine their future lives as their successful educators. Provided that the teachers have a nice and acceptable habit, the students, as their followers, will enthusiastically intimate that habit owing to the fact that they have faith in their teachers. To put it into a more vivid picture, when I was thirteen-years-old, I had a really handsome English professor whom all the students admired because of his gentle behavior and etiquette cloths. He always waxed his shoes whenever he attended our class, and it was not important to him that his attendants are adolescents. Following his rules, in that age, I got used to waxing my shoes every day. I have this pleasant habit until now thanks to my beloved lecturer.
The second and foremost rationalization to bear in mind is that students always are prone to listen to experiences said from elderly people. Therefore, providing that they find a teacher's ideas fine, they will accept their stories completely. As an illustration, my cousin was a naughty student in highschool. He always fought with other students, ran away from school, and did not study his lessons well. Nonetheless, his mathematics was really great as a result of the fact that his maths teacher was a nice and seasoned one. Whatever he said, my cousin would listen; therefore, one day, his teacher talked to my cousin for three hours and shared his own experiences with him. The teacher told him that he himself was a worthless student when he was younger, but he finally realized that his actions would not profit him at all in long terms. Thus, he asked my cousin not to continue his bad and unacceptable behaviors for his own sake. Afterwards, my cousin gradually became a better student, and now, he is a successful entrepreneur insomuch as he accepted his teacher's story of life.
In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned rationalizations and experiences into account, I believe that students are more influenced from their teachers than their collegues. They see their best teachers as their own role models and heros, and they want to be them when they are grwonups. Additionally, they listen to their teachers better in comparison to their same-age friends since they acknowledge that their teachers' experiences are very valuable.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, nonetheless, really, regarding, second, so, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, as a result, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 94.0 43.0788530466 218% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2511.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0119760479 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85788754939 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497005988024 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 761.4 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6811985678 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.136363636 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7727272727 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95454545455 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294604399152 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0992112038592 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115805337789 0.0737576698707 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225102144338 0.150856017488 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110710881131 0.0645574589148 171% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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