TPO-18 - Independent Writing Task
I desagree with the statement that students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. There are two reasons and personal examples to support my opinion.
First of all, I am inclined to believe that the fact of teenager have same age, they tend to similar minds and perspectives about World and the life, like perceptions about that are alright and wrong. In this way, many students have trend to do wrong things. For example, when I was a young person, my friend Artur called me to go to the party that was not to our age, like the party was forbidden, we were harmed. Change the perspective, in my opinion, similarly students do wrong things influenced by their friend, they can to do good things, because they are more open to listen their friends than parents or teachers. For example, in other time, my friend Fernanda called me to go to the church with her, and I went, even though, in the past time, when my grandmother had invited me to go, I do not wanted to think that go to the church was attitud of old people.
In the second place, a young people usually mind that nobody understand him, if not his friend. From my point of view, this fact It is truth because around this period of age, teenager usually have more interaction with friends than teachers or family, so, It is normal that they mind of same form, morever nowdays, people have more acess to cellphones, computer than in the past time, factor to give much space to students talk and discuss ideas. For example, little time ago, when I was teenager, In my mind, my mother do not understood me and I talked about my life with my best friend. However, nowdays, I have seen that my mother could had help me more than my friend that nothing knew about life.
In conclusion, there are my reasons to desagree with the statement “Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends”.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 234, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'trended'.
Suggestion: trended
... wrong. In this way, many students have trend to do wrong things. For example, when I...
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Line 3, column 742, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...th her, and I went, even though, in the past time, when my grandmother had invited me to ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 869, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o the church was attitud of old people. In the second place, a young people usua...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 376, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...ess to cellphones, computer than in the past time, factor to give much space to students ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 642, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...wdays, I have seen that my mother could had help me more than my friend that nothin...
^^^
Line 5, column 646, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'helped'.
Suggestion: helped
...s, I have seen that my mother could had help me more than my friend that nothing kne...
^^^^
Line 5, column 646, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[3]
Message: Possible agreement error – use past participle here: 'helped'.
Suggestion: helped
...s, I have seen that my mother could had help me more than my friend that nothing kne...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, similarly, so, as for, for example, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58944281525 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44016465774 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483870967742 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 470.7 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.0669858445 48.9658058833 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.416666667 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4166666667 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5833333333 5.45110844103 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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