TPO-18 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays a vast part of people adhere to the idea that pupils are more effected by their educators than by their friends. Although some people may not agree with the stance, I profoundly buttress it because of the reasons which will be discussed in details below.
Firstly, teachers are professionals who were taught how to control and impact on children. All educators who work with students were taught in colleges and universities how to do their job properly. Their education programs had such subjects as developmental psychology, sociology, child psychology which are intentionally included in the programs in order to provide future teachers with efficient and professional tools of influence students without which they will not be able to do their job properly.
Secondly, school educators are adults who by default placed at a dominant position. The majority of students enroll in an elementary school at an early age of 6 -7 years. At this age children have a deep necessity in parents' attention and teachers basically substitute parents for pupils. In fact, it is natural for youngsters to obey and respect grown-ups because they badly depend on their good will. For instance, a child cannot acquire food, clothes and cannot secure safety. Educators who have this dominant position may relatively easy impact on their students. Additionally to it, teachers may use the system of reward which is inbuilt in school life: by scoring child's performance, a teacher may exercise one's influence.
Admittedly, there are some reasons which allow someone to state that classmates and friends have stronger influence on students. Chiefly, the one may aver that friends may impact on other fellow students because of informal relationships among them and group dynamic. However, I still strongly affirm that teachers have more influence on their pupils because in many cases teachers have informal relationships with their listeners as well and often students seek their advice and support. In other words, a power of any classmate fells short in comparison with power of teachers who rely on education system, their life experience and professional knowledge.
To wrap up, teachers have influenced their student more strongly because they are grown-ups with professional knowledge, expertise and life-experience. Additionally to it, the system of education itself provides them with all needed means which may be efficiently employed to exercise power and influence on pupils.
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Essay evaluation report
school educators are adults who by default placed at a dominant position
school educators are adults who by default are placed at a dominant position
flaws:
1.better to argue the same way like the reason three. like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
2. No. of Words: 390 while No. of Different Words: 199
We are expecting:
No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 390 350
No. of Characters: 2048 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.444 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.251 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.785 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 161 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.93 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.314 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.544 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.088 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 569, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
...latively easy impact on their students. Additionally to it, teachers may use the system of r...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 714, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...lds performance, a teacher may exercise ones influence. Admittedly, there are som...
^^^^
Line 9, column 153, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
...owledge, expertise and life-experience. Additionally to it, the system of education itself p...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, well, for instance, in fact, in many cases, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2102.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38974358974 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85188150865 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520512820513 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.795805012 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.777777778 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196682222845 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655811021542 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0584436800456 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128884293456 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037114861759 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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