TPO 22:
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
These days, an appropriate job can influence the majority of human’s life aspects. So people plan and effort hard to obtain a suitable job. A controversial question which is often raised regarding planning to achieve a good job is what is the best balance between learning scientific material and relation skills. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that students should study as hard as they can instead of trying to enhance their social skills, while others look at this concept through a different lens. As I am concerned, ability to communicate with others is more vital than scientific materials because not only the world has been changing and consequently the importance of relationship networking increasing, but also connection skills are a crucial requirement for promotion. In addition technology progress is confining job opportunities.
The first reason that should be mentioned is nowadays, the network of relationships become a critical parameter in the job selection process. The population and the job competition has been increasing. The more population, the more candidate for each vacant opportunity. In consequence, although one study hard and learn a variety of knowledge very well, he needs his communication for finding an appropriate job. Furthermore, in many jobs, individual-work has given place to team-work. So everyone must relate to others for doing his job because it is no matter that every single employee do his job well or not, but the efficiency of the whole team will evaluate.
The further more subtle point is in today world, communication is a critical requirement for promotion. Every employee is trying to elevate and become a manager and becoming a manager means a broad relationship with other people. Every level that one elevate causes an increase in the number of the related employee. Therefore employers do not expect from a low-level employee to has high-level communication skills, in the other hand, they have this expectation from a manager. So if the new manager has not this skill and cannot relate with others appropriately, he cannot last a long time in managerial position. Obviously, one can choose either become an ordinary employee in the best case scenario or achieving communication skills.
The last but not least reason is these days, it goes without saying that in such a sophisticated world where the technology growing so fast that it could hardly be believed, robots have been occupying many jobs. There is not enough that one just studies hard and learn science with no knowledge about communication and become just an operator because computers and robots with the assistance of the internet can do this faster than humans. So if people want a safe job in the future, they should try to do what automatons cannot do.
To summarize, as regards increasing importance of relationship networks, the vitality of communication techniques for promotion and development of robots and computers, it is obvious that learning methods of communicate with other people are more essential than scientific knowledge. It seems that those trends are continuing. So in this situation, who can tell focus on study hard in school is enough?
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 802, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...a crucial requirement for promotion. In addition technology progress is confining job op...
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Line 3, column 203, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...he job competition has been increasing. The more population, the more candidate for...
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Line 5, column 318, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... in the number of the related employee. Therefore employers do not expect from a low-leve...
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Line 7, column 14, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'not the least'.
Suggestion: not the least
...g communication skills. The last but not least reason is these days, it goes without s...
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Line 8, column 206, Rule ID: LEARN_NNNNS_ON_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to'?
Suggestion: to
...rs, it is obvious that learning methods of communicate with other people are more ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, look, regarding, so, therefore, well, while, as regards, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 31.0 8.0752688172 384% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2702.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 516.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23643410853 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00974670127 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515503875969 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 845.1 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.7648610187 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.583333333 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250412496262 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686682111033 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540324714468 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150850994892 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0697465146112 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.