TPO 23 independent
Agree or disagree
in today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.
Today's world is considered as a VUCA (volatile and complex) place where all the employees and knowledge workers must try as hard as they can to fulfill their companies' requirements. In this context, there are mutually exclusive idealizations regarding whether working quickly in order to finish the job is more acceptable or working more slowly with higher concentration. In my point of view, I am inclined to the latter idea in spite of the fact that the former has more aficionados among adults. My answer to this bone of contention is twofold, and in the following, the rationale behind it will be elaborated by the most outstanding, solid proofs.
The first and foremost reason which is worth mentioning is that by focusing on what is going to be proposed, the reliability of one person will increase among their colleagues. As PMI (project management institute) claims: "engineers and workers always have to double check their reports before handing them over to their supervisors/ managers". To put in into a more vivid picture, I was a project control engineer three years ago when I was undergoing mandatory military service in my city, Kerman. At first, I thought that working fast is the climax objective of every engineer; therefore, I always tried hard to report to my manager regardless of what I was going to share with him. As a result, all of my reports were full of mistakes, the charts were unsatisfying, and the headlined were mislead. My manager, Reza, asked me to have a meeting with him. In the meeting, he told me working more efficiently is more vital than finishing my tasks fast; in other words, he meant that the faster an individual works, the more they are prone to mistakes. Afterwards, I realized that handing over the tasks in the most effective way is the main goal of every job.
The second and equally far-reaching rationalization to bear in mind is that this mindset will gradually affect the quality of the individuals' tasks positively. Provided that a worker concentrate on their tasks and omit their mistakes and flaws consciously, they will do the exact correct work unconsciously in the future. Researchers of RMIT, one of the best universities in Australia, conducted a survey of civil engineers among whom they disseminated a questionnaire. They realized that there is an indirect exponential relation between their mistakes and their amount of effort concentrating on their work. In other words, the more they concentrate, the better results they will obtain, and they do not need to focus consciously on what they do after a few years. Like Buffet who was consciously trading in stockmarket for 30 years and made so many mistakes, but afterwards, he has been doing his job in the best way unconsciously since he had made his mistakes before.
In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned justifications into account, I concur that working more slowly is more momentous for workers. In that case, they will be considered as a reliable person among others since they always finish everything correctly. Besides, this mindset will help workers to do their tasks unconsiously and without thinking about what is wrong and what is right to do.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
...ts were unsatisfying, and the headlined were mislead. My manager, Reza, asked me to ...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'misled'.
Suggestion: misled
...re unsatisfying, and the headlined were mislead. My manager, Reza, asked me to have a m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, regarding, second, so, therefore, in conclusion, as a result, in other words, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2666.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 532.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01127819549 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80261649409 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97228182857 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526315789474 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 824.4 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 34.1957152108 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.952380952 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130241986442 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0398270039898 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550929536663 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0904129255348 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313947481087 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 86.8835125448 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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