TPO-24
Any society contains a various group of ages; kids, young people, and old peoples. Young people of society are producer group that has an important role in that community. Some people believe in the past young people had more responsibility and were more careful about their community, but nowadays they do not have any respect for their society and do not care about it. In my way of thinking, young people do not give enough time for their community because not only are they busy, but also they are grown more selfish today.
The first reason which should be stated here is that in modern society people are busier, so they do not have enough time to spend to their community. Technology improvements make a significant effect on people's life. They should start to work from sunrise to sunset. In addition, nowadays people have many concerns in their life. For example, how to earn more money, how to pay their bills, how to grow their children, and so on. In spite of this busy life, they would not have time to spend for their society.
The other point that could be mentioned here is that today young men are more selfish than before. In the past people had to work from childhood and it made them more responsible, but nowadays they do nothing; everything are prepared for them by their parents. This leads them to be selfish and lazy, so when they arrive at adult age, they will not contribute to their community concerns. As an example, consider a little kid that have all the things that he wanted, and there is no problem in their life that their parents would not handle it for them. That kid grew lazy and selfish, and he thinks everybody should do his favorite. When he became young, he will not help to his community.
To make whole issues short, nowadays young people do not contribute to their community and do not care about it because they are busier and lazier than what were they before.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, for example, in addition, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1572.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59649122807 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.238467857 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476608187135 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 493.2 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8243222766 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4705882353 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1176470588 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.70588235294 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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