Children nurturing has attracted much social concern. Many educational specialists believe that encouraging children to take part-time jobs is one of the best ways parents should do to help them prepare for the future. Personally, I bear in mind a strong agreement with this belief.
On the one hand, what has been put under consideration is personal development. The fact is that have a part-time job creates chances for children to be exposed to varied circumstances and difficulties. Therefore, it is possible for them to reflect on themselves and have more experiences in working as well as interacting with their living environment. As a result, children are supposed to be aware of their own strengths and weaknesses to regulate themselves suitably. Consequently, this plays a crucial role in promoting children to fill the gaps in their abilities. More importantly, it cannot be denied that taking part-time jobs possesses a large probability for children to put the effort into working and have an amount of income for their own. It leads to the fact that they gradually attain the appreciation for the money received and try to learn how to utilize them appropriately. On that ground, needless to say, there a likelihood for them to enhance their money management skills and this consequently sets a good foundation for their future. By and large, encouraging children to involve in a part-time job is a great idea for parents.
On the other hand, some people might say that having part-time jobs forces children to become too busy when they have to regulate time between studying and working. Accordingly, they will get extreme stress. However, this is just applicable to a minority. It is widely known that every company or business group always has policies to prevent stress on workers by giving them a suitable amount of tasks. It follows that children can both have a part-time job and schedule for everything to be under control. Furthermore, taking part-time jobs stands a golden chance for children to meet many different people. In this case, it is expected to promote them to associate with others and enlarge their social relationships. Correspondingly, it is apparent that children are capable of having a lot of friends and getting many supports in their lives. This, in turn, forms a huge contribution to helping them going through every matter and gain success in their future career. Subsequently, it is certain for children to be filled with satisfactory feelings. Beyond any doubt, the idea that taking part-time jobs extremely stresses children is often possible to end in collapse.
In a word, all factors mentioned above are evidence supporting my agreement. It is highly recommended that everyone should take my writing into careful consideration to make an appropriate decision in bringing up the children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 588, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ds a golden chance for children to meet many different people. In this case, it is expected to...
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Line 5, column 905, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to go' or 'go'.
Suggestion: to go; go
...rms a huge contribution to helping them going through every matter and gain success i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, well, as a result, as well as, by and large, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2388.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15766738661 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96687312817 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537796976242 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 738.0 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6824197795 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.52 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.52 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.00701259119271 0.236089414692 3% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00234794745869 0.076458572812 3% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0115025464333 0.0737576698707 16% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0113678118307 0.150856017488 8% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0196896276616 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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