When thinking about the issue that one of the best ways for parent to help their kids prepare for adult life is to abet them to take a part-time job, varied individuals will have diverse ideas. Some citizens claim that youngsters should put their heart on study, so they should not take a part-time job. However, from where I stand, it is conducive for children to take a part-time job because they can acquire practical skills and form the sense of responsibility.
First and foremost, the pivotal role of adult is to take the corresponding responsibility. Taking a part-time job minority can attain extra money which can alleviate the pressure of their parents. Through this way, they will feel get more involved in their families' issue, which are beneficial for them to cultivate the sense of responsibility. Take my elder brother who is a graduate in Peking University as an example. When he was senior, his parents required him to take a part-time job to cover his daily expenditure. And he chose a job of instructing high school students, which brought him a considerable income. In this way, he was able to pay his daily cost himself and also pay a solid way for his graduate life. Part-time job enable juvenile to subsist a live themselves and get more involved in their families' affairs.
Furthermore, it is crucial for an adult to learn how to make a living, thus take a part-time job before graduate is necessary. Through doing a part-time job kids can learn plenty basic living skills and professional knowledge. With these skills and expertise, they can easily handle onerous tasks in their future career. For instance, being a assistant, young people can acquire the ability to organize and coordinate a major event. And being a mediocre employee, they will grasp how to adeptly use office software such as, word, powerpoint and excel. As a result, it help teenagers to get fully prepare for seeking a job after they graduate from college.
In a nutshell, not only does taking a part-time job allow youngsters to form the sense of responsibility, but also they can accumulate experience and expertise. Therefore, I strongly endorse that encouraging children to take a part-time job is a best ways for parents to help them get prepare for their future life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: an
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Message: Did you mean 'helps'?
Suggestion: helps
..., powerpoint and excel. As a result, it help teenagers to get fully prepare for seek...
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Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, for instance, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89147286822 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79186022297 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509043927649 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.7041739515 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6315789474 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3684210526 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21052631579 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.37422224412 0.236089414692 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124142425095 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0971200426345 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271879208159 0.150856017488 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0683884841603 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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