Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
When thinking about the issue that famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now, varied individuals will have diverse ideas. Some citizens claim that they should not request more privacy since notables usually have decent salaries, plus the lives of them can also bring them plenty of benefits. However, from where I stand, celebrities are also human beings who deserve secluded lives. And we should pay more attention on their outcomes rather than their private lives.
First and foremost, too much exposed can not only bring themselves troubles, but also their family members or relatives will get involved. In this circumstance, the lives of celebrities' families can be drastically affect and they may even suffer from insult. Take the noted athletes Sun Yang as an example. Sun Yang is a famous swimming athlete and once he encountered an accident that he was driving a car after drinking too much alcohol. Then more and more media covered this scandal, and he got a lot criticism. And some maniacal fans even sent menace letter to his family, which brought severe scare to him. In this way, notables need more privacy to protect themselves and people them love.
Furthermore, we should focus on their achievements rather than their personal affairs because it is a person' s attribution that we should emphasize when we appraisal a man. And what an entertainer likes to eat, or who he is dating with are not our business. For instance, when we identify wether an athlete is eligible, we should refer to his athletic performance. Jackie Cheng is a renowned actor, nevertheless, he previously did some ignoble things. But we still tend to evaluate his achievement by his movies rather than his moral quality. We should pay more attention on famous people's production and leave them private space.
In a nutshell, not only may it be injurious to celebrities' families, but also we should accentuate their professional performance; therefore, I strongly endorse the statement mentioned in question.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, then, therefore, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 52.1666666667 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1709.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11676646707 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70772755623 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586826347305 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5800875862 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9444444444 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5555555556 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72222222222 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185087599078 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058296515766 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0855929806766 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111066768521 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10158864266 0.0645574589148 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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