TPO 25
The lecture and the passage are both about the use of electricity on Ancient world, especially in recent archeological investigations in Iraq which revealed clay jays containing a copper cylinder; each one surrounded with an iron rod. The author of the article feels that these findings have no reasonable support for use of electricity in the ancient civilization. However, the professor challenges the claims made by the author. She is of the opinion that these vessels could be used as electric power in the old centuries.
To begin with, the author argues that no evidence of any conductors has been found in order to use the electricity. This specific argument is challenged by the lecturer. she claims that these vessels and cylanders are initially foud by local people, not archeologist. She skepticize that every elements may reamained without any change. She suggests that might have some conductors which archeologist didnot discovered.
Seconly, the writer suggests that there is no unique historical finding since alike cooper cylinders had been discovered in another ancient city named Seleucia. The author supports this idea that cooper cylinders were used to hold scrolls and sacred texts, not for electric power generating, in ancient Seleucia. On the other hand, the lecturer defends the idea of electricity-generating because the archeologists discovered iron rods surrounding the clay jays. She adds that it is possible to use exact cylender in two cities but rather for two deferens disposes.
Finally the author posits that these facilities should be used in order to a concrete practical way while there is no evidence of any devices which demands electricity. In contrast, the lecturer questions this idea by simple examples of possible uses of electric power. These examples include medical uses and defending uses of electricity. In ancient medicine, for instance, the physician used a mild shock, called The Magic, to heal or manage pain.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 171, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...argument is challenged by the lecturer. she claims that these vessels and cylanders...
^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...ut rather for two deferens disposes. Finally the author posits that these facilities...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, may, so, while, for instance, in contrast, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1662.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 312.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32692307692 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95263814107 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567307692308 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0895303141 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.7647058824 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3529411765 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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