Young people have been changing over the past of the years in many ways, their lifestyles are busier, they do not have time for taking a walk, and so forth. Therefore, I agree that a community life is also affected by today’s different young people, due to the fact that they focus on other things than on just helping their community. I cling to this outlook because of two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the technological advance has created a virtual world in which everyone can rely on to go through this life, in fact, if a young man, nowadays, wanted to ask his neighbor for something, he would better surf into the internet and thus he would be saving lots of time. Besides, people nowadays are extremely addicted to their smartphones, they prefer to call their neighbors instead of going to see them. Therefore, if a community member had a problem, their neighbors would not be totally available to help them because they are stuck to their cellphones. For instance, my friend told me last night that one day, he needed some help from his mechanic neighbor, but the mechanic man said that he could not resolve his problem because he did not know how to do it, the next day, my friend found out that the mechanic was in call with his girlfriend and he did not hang out, for that he did not want to help him.
Secondly, it is common knowledge that the world is more competitive now than in the past, because of this, people need to struggle a lot if they want to succeed in life. Young people have worries about what they need to do for the university or college, mothers are worried about their children and the house, and father about their businesses or jobs. So, there is no time to help neighbors. In the past was normal that a community mother joined to another mother’s house to cook because both mothers had time to do it, but right now is much different. To clarify my point, let me take as an example, a week ago, a neighbor of mine came to my house to ask me a favor related to his homework, however I could not help him because on that day I had a bunch of homework to complete too, so I denied to do it. This clearly explains why people nowadays do not have time to help their community partners.
To sum up, I strongly believe that today’s young people are not altruistic with their neighbors because they have more important things to do such as looking for something on the internet or trying to fulfill their daily labors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 796, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'denied doing'.
Suggestion: denied doing
...bunch of homework to complete too, so I denied to do it. This clearly explains why people n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in fact, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2057.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49126637555 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43957212961 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513100436681 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.4488979645 48.9658058833 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.928571429 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.7142857143 20.6045352989 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.45110844103 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188627376467 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0816139163383 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511378243992 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132047318695 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0269425870627 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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