TPO-26
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents' jobs.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The upbringing of children is always a controversial subject as parents always concerned about it. Choosing the same career as a parent is very common- but not necessarily a good idea. Although some people think that if kids choose the same profession as their parent's, they can guide them through it, I personally believe it is not an ideal choice. I have three rationales for the support of this claim, which I elaborate upon hereunder.
To begin with, if parents hammer their profession to their children, it may indulge their inborn talents and perspectives. In addition, they can't be independent or self-reliant if parents spoon-feed them and insisting on them to follow their job. My sister's life is a compelling example on this. She had an inborn talent for singing which she wanted to choose as her career. She used to sing in the church choir and in concerts conducted by her school. My father was rebellious about her participation in these competitions because he wants her to choose his profession- An attorney. As a result, she leaves her passionate talent and joined in the law school in accordance with my father's will. Presently she had a miserable time in her school and she regrets her singing life. From this instance, it is clear that how much negative effect in the inborn talents if parents pressurize their children to take their careers.
Next, the 'Mini-Me' concept of parents can torcher children's mental health. Moreover, this can ruin their physical as well as social health. In other words, if parents compel their kids to choose their profession, it can deteriorate healthy relationships between family and society as well. Children tend to be anti-social and hurt themselves physically and mentally. My life is ample proof of this particular claim. As I mentioned in the above example, my father's immense pressure to be an advocate ruins my mental status. He had explained the details of his criminal and civil cases that he attends in our family discussions, which I was least eager to hear. His constant faith in me raised my blood pressure and I was hospitalized for the same. The doctor suggested my parents to stop insisting me to choose the same career. Eventually, I decided to move away from my family and I followed my dream as a doctor. This can precisely show a change in mental, social, and physical health after a continuum of torchering from parents regarding career.
Finally, parents want to raise their children as their juniors. A doctor wants their son/ daughter to be a doctor. Even if they know the pros and cons of the profession, they still argue them to choose the same profession. This concept should be changed.
All in all, by taking all the reasons into account, I vehemently assure that choosing the same profession as their parents is a worse idea. Not only this can interrupt their talents and dreams but also it can interfere with the social, physical, and mental status of children.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 142, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...nts and perspectives. In addition, they cant be independent or self-reliant if paren...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, still, well, in addition, as a result, as well as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 86.0 43.0788530466 200% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2455.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 502.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89043824701 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70787481075 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501992031873 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 738.9 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.9759555503 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.8333333333 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7333333333 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.46666666667 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255630918387 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672716471473 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600696563475 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145421178084 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265763345092 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 142, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...nts and perspectives. In addition, they cant be independent or self-reliant if paren...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, still, well, in addition, as a result, as well as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 86.0 43.0788530466 200% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2455.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 502.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89043824701 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70787481075 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501992031873 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 738.9 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.9759555503 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.8333333333 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7333333333 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.46666666667 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255630918387 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672716471473 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600696563475 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145421178084 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265763345092 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.