Nowadays job plays a key role in our life. After either graduation from high school or university, people are usually engaged in one occupation for the rest of their life until they get retired. Therefore, choosing a career is essential for a happier life. Some may support the idea that it is better to choose similar jobs with that of parents whereas, I hold the opposite idea that choosing your desired job is always better. I shall discuss the underlying reasons for my opinion.
To begin with, everyone may have a different interest, personality or ideology. Therefore, choosing a job according to their characteristics and joys is more reasonable. For instance, one of my friend's father who is a doctor had always been pushed my friend to be a doctor. Then, he passed the university exam and was accepted a medical department. Unfortunately, he gave up studying medicine because could not enjoy life by doing a job that he did not desire. Another example is from my life. I have always wanted to be a soldier since my childhood and pursue my dream as much as I could. Conversely, my father would recommend me to be an accountant like him. Thus, he could help me to find a job easily. I, however, decided to be an officer and succeed it. Now, I am really happy about doing this job.
Secondly, economic conditions and some developments may change trends in business life. Some occupations, sometimes, may be popular and demand more employees and another time, they might lose their attractions. For instance, the nursery was not as popular as it is now in a decades ago. The government built plenty of hospitals and make the health sector alive. Therefore, the nursery became a prestigious and popular job. Many young adults wanted to be a nurse rather than choosing their dreams since it offered plenty of social and economic benefits. Another example is about aviation. There is a high amount of demands to the pilots and, Turkish Airlines, which is a flag carrier of Turkey, offers Turkish citizens an opportunity to become a pilot. After being successful in the whole process of becoming a pilot, most people are willing to leave their job in order to join Turkish Airlines. To my way of thinking, in such cases, it is better to choose trend jobs rather than choosing jobs either similar to your parents' job or your dream job.
To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that it is not important to have a job that is similar to that of your parents. I believe that people should consider their personality, interest, and dreams while choosing their job. This way, they could get gratified from their occupation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 267, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'supports'.
Suggestion: supports
... essential for a happier life. Some may support the idea that it is better to choose si...
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Line 3, column 677, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help me find' instead.
Suggestion: help me find
... an accountant like him. Thus, he could help me to find a job easily. I, however, decided to be...
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Line 5, column 273, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a decade' or simply 'decades'?
Suggestion: a decade; decades
...sery was not as popular as it is now in a decades ago. The government built plenty of hos...
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Line 5, column 957, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to trend'
Suggestion: to trend
..., in such cases, it is better to choose trend jobs rather than choosing jobs either s...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, whereas, while, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2174.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75711159737 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66835535083 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520787746171 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.8740287511 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.9655172414 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7586206897 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.34482758621 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33891621452 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0842601723198 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0973348491205 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234596977342 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573800958701 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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