tpo 27
Staring a new job is always a big concern for everyone. Some people would take any secure job they are offered. Others wouldn't, unless the job is as satisfying as what they dream of. In my view i think that taking a secure job right away is wiser than waiting for the satisfying job for three reasons.
First, waiting for a better job means earning no money. That's why i think taking any secure job is better, since you will be making some money until you get the chance to start a more satisfying job. Moreover, getting used to a lazy life style whilst waiting for a good job would be very difficult to get over after they get the job they want. So they might find themselves not liking the job that they dreamed of just because it has forced them to quit their laziness.
Second, working in whatever available is better than waiting because people can gain experience from such temporary jobs. As people work in jobs they don't like they will quit it sooner or later, so why not focus on the bright side here, which is gaining experience and adding it to the CV. For instance, i remember when my girlfriend was unemployed for a while, and then finally i could convince her to get the job she was offered in a coffee shop. She obviously didn't like the job itself but it was a good thing to add to her CV when she was applying for a new job, It was kind of a proof of what she has described herself in the CV as a strong woman who can deal with all people's attitudes.
Third, working in a non satisfying job will give such a great feeling of appreciation to the dream job when they finally get it. For example, when I first started working I was only offered a job in a far hospital that wasn't even in the speciality that I wanted. But after two years of working there I finally got offered a job in a hospital in my neighborhood and it was much better than the previous one. I think if I didn't experience working in tough situations and in an atmosphere that i don't like, I wouldn't have appreciated my new job as much as I do now.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...any secure job they are offered. Others wouldnt, unless the job is as satisfying as wha...
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...offered. Others wouldnt, unless the job is as satisfying as what they dream of. In my view i thi...
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...fying as what they dream of. In my view i think that taking a secure job right aw...
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...he satisfying job for three reasons. First, waiting for a better job means ea...
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...or a better job means earning no money. Thats why i think taking any secure job is be...
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... forced them to quit their laziness. Second, working in whatever available is...
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... proof of what she has described herself in the CV as a strong woman who can deal...
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...can deal with all peoples attitudes. Third, working in a non satisfying job w...
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...ly offered a job in a far hospital that wasnt even in the speciality that I wanted. B...
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...ter than the previous one. I think if I didnt experience working in tough situations ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, moreover, second, so, then, third, while, as for, for example, for instance, i think, kind of, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1653.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.24935732648 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33520639693 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501285347044 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9181838528 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.3125 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3125 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.125 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.5376344086 361% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.5 58.1214874552 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.67 10.9000537634 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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