TPO-27
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Everyone is aware of the fact that jobs are essential for sustaining life. In a family, at least one person should have some sort of earnings to maintain it. A lot of people have distinct views regarding which job they should accept, whether a secure job or a satisfying job. However, as far as I'm concerned, I will wait to get a profession that is more satisfying. I can explain two rationals for the support of my claim, which I elaborate upon hereunder.
To begin with, if a job is satisfying, then only they can sustain in that. On the other hand, those who pick a secure job, it is not certain how much time they can stay in the job due to lack of experience, interest, or boredom. My newly recruited dental assistant is a compelling example of this situation. In my dental clinic, we are short of assistants due to the global pandemic-COVID-19. Hence, In her resume, it is stated that she is a business graduate. While during her interview, I recognized that she had excellent communication skills and well mannered, which are the basic attributes of a person who works as a dental assistant. Hence, I appointed her. Initially, she was proper and never failed in dealing with patients. Later on, I felt that she have less interest in the profession. Furthermore, she states that she had lost her job as a business employe in a private firm due to the pandemic and in search of his job hunt, she saw the advertisement for the dental assistant. She was attracted by the benefits, salary, and full-time hours. Eventually, I fired her because she made an inconvenience with patients. Through this instance, it is clear that a satisfying job is better than a secure one.
Next, a satisfying job provides us self-esteem than unfamiliar jobs. The interest motivates them to work hard to improve their abilities that inturn brings heights to their career. For instance, after my graduation, I set up a dental clinic. To improve my speaking skills I took additional classes and my dealing with patients attracted a lot of customers to my clinic. I improved my practical skills and tried to give the best outcome to the patients. I can affirm that due to my constant interest in dentistry, I was able to do hard work to improve my skills. Thus, I got the best clinician award last year. This raised my self-esteem.
All in all, I vehemently assure that selecting a satisfying job even if it took quite a bit of time is much better than going behind opportunities for secure jobs. Not only people can sustain in that job but also they can ameliorate self-esteem.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 296, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...or a satisfying job. However, as far as Im concerned, I will wait to get a profess...
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Line 3, column 25, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...n hereunder. To begin with, if a job is satisfying, then only they can sustain in that. On...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, regarding, so, then, thus, well, while, at least, for instance, sort of, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2115.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67920353982 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87207597137 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519911504425 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 23.0 9.59856630824 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.4868805911 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.5357142857 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1428571429 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.32142857143 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213176387343 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556794126854 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642308909571 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150391352624 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0768928920163 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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