Nowadays, looking for a job is considered one of the most important aspects in our lives. Recently, many students are ver curious about their career after graduation. I am sure that many people would agree that it is a great idea idea to work at satisfying position, while others would disagree. However, when it comes to me I totally agree that we have to find a secure job after the graduation. I feel this way for two important reasons, which I will demonstrate in the following essay.
To begin with, having a secure job can halp us to relieve our stress. At this days, we are caring about our future and we are living in a very dynamic world. Every one of us is thinking about his practicle life and how we can get promoted. For instance, my uncle is a doctor and he is working in a big hospital at New york. In fact, he is dream to find a job abroad. Even tough he got opportunity to work as a physician at clinic in another country, he refused. This is becasue he knows that there is no stability at all. Moreover, he stayed at his position at New York and after two years he got promoted as a hospital manger. Furthermore, he got a huge salary and he would able to live the life that he always dreamed of. On the other hand, if he agreed to work in another country that sometimes make downsizing, he might get fired. Consequently, he might regret his decision. As you can see, we can save our career when we work in a secure job.
In addition, secure job can help us to cover a lot of expenses. We have many responsibilities regardless our families. For example, my husband is taking care of a big family and has to pay a lot of money in the begining of each month. For instance, he has to pay for rent, buying food and drinks, and pay for our daughter's univerisity fee. So, my husband has to work at position that can provide him with specific amount of money that can cover these expenses. Furthermore, we have a limited budget that we can depend on. As a result, my husband can not ever take a risk to search about any job that could br more satisfying. Nevertheless, If he left his job to find another more convenient job, he might lose our future and he might put the whole family under risk. This experience taught me that we have to save any secure job.
In sum, I strongly agree that we have to saty at a scure job, this is because we can cover a lot of expenses, and because we are resposible about our families.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, nevertheless, so, while, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in fact, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 43.0788530466 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.29067245119 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52093777353 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468546637744 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.3978688897 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.2592592593 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0740740741 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.03703703704 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169098852889 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0569004858551 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459874889113 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115852580967 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422748277281 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.3 11.7677419355 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.31 10.9000537634 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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