TPO-29 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Education is one of the most important parts of each person's life. the government in order to prepare it's person's needed, has directly attention on this.what is obviously can be seen by the high budget that is considered for universities.by these incredible attention universities have to make a plan in order to improve the quality of education. on a way which totally disagrees about that is to increase professors salaries what can be definitely has a good effect on education quality. in the following two reasons for this idea are rendered:

First and foremost is professors motivation. there is rarely professor who teach to the students because of its own love to teach. most of them do it because it's economic need therefore if they know that they would gain more money if they work better they exactly do that. for instance, my aunt is a professor who teaches chemist at the university. she did that because she can't find any job and she had Ph.D. on this major. she told me that first years of her works she did it because she needs its money and two years later she got and reward because of the high satisfied that she got from her students and the announced her that they want to increase her salary, therefore, she began to teach with more enthusiastic and harder than before in order to get more money.

Second, one way to increase the quality of education is to change the methods of teaching in a way that make the learning more easier and deeper.what is important in this way is money. learning teaching methods need money to pay the cost if that hence if university increases the professors' salaries they would spend the amount of them in this way and try to learn new things. then they can learn them to students.for instance my aunt after got that rewards she spends some of them to learn new methods and buy some good instruments to teach them better and her students were more convinced that the past time.

For summery, money is the best way for motivation and today nothing wouldn't be improved unless money is there. and education isn't far away of this subject.motivation is the main key of the high quality of education and near to that, being money to be spent in a learning way, would help professor to do their tasks better with more value.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
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...one of the most important parts of each persons life. the government in order to prepar...
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...er to improve the quality of education. on a way which totally disagrees about tha...
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... and foremost is professors motivation. there is rarely professor who teach to the st...
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...dents because of its own love to teach. most of them do it because its economic need...
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... they work better they exactly do that. for instance, my aunt is a professor who te...
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...he university. she did that because she cant find any job and she had Ph.D. on this ...
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...eed money to pay the cost if that hence if university increases the professors sal...
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...n this way and try to learn new things. then they can learn them to students.for ins...
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...st way for motivation and today nothing wouldnt be improved unless money is there. and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, second, so, then, therefore, thus, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1874.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62716049383 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56635280951 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466666666667 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.3226913445 48.9658058833 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.857142857 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9285714286 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64285714286 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.5376344086 361% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.108410809659 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0406980580123 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0338546051226 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0755330361621 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285890598463 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.17 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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