tpo 30
Nowadays, having a job has become the number one priorities in everyones' life. Furthermore, people have certain preference in a job that they looking for. Should people choose to work long hours or shorts hours? This is a controversial question. Some people like to work long hours for three days a week because they feel this option will give them much freedom. Although I understand their point of view, I wholeheartedly believe that working for short hours like five or six even for five days a week is more beneficial because it allows people to have fun for two conspicous reasons.
One of the reasons why people should opt for working short hours per week for five days a week is because it helps people to enjoy their lives with their families. For example, If a man who started to work in Mirosoft for 6 to 8 hours each day in department of soft engnering, he would be able to have not only breakfast with his family but also the dinnar. Furthermore, he would be able to chat with his children about what happen in their school day. If the man had worked long hours, he would not have been able to enjoy these perious time with his family members. Even though some might aruges that having several days off in a row would give people a chance to travel and have vaction, employees can take their vication hours or days if they want to travel. For this reason, in order for working parents to enjoy their time with beloved ones, they need to work shorts hours per days.
Another reason choosing to work short hours days for five days a week is advantegous is that it helps people reduce their stress. To illustrate this, research has been done on 1500 employees of Google company all of the world about which choice make them more strees; working long hours or short hours. Unexpectedly, 75% of the participants stated that they usually do not seelp well a night before the long day shift because they streeted out even before the long hour day shift started. Thus, the data show that working less hours per day for five days a week reduces people strees drastically. If these workes had not selected to work long hours days, they would not have reduced their sleeping hours the night before the shift started. Hence, working shorter hours per days allows people to live a healthy life style.
To sum up, people should work short-day shifts even for more days a week because it not only provides workers with a better chance to enjoy their lifes with their families but also protects them from being stressed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 210, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...one on 1500 employees of Google company all of the world about which choice make them more...
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Line 5, column 523, Rule ID: LESS_DOLLARSMINUTESHOURS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer hours'?
Suggestion: fewer hours
...arted. Thus, the data show that working less hours per day for five days a week reduces pe...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 523, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun hours is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...arted. Thus, the data show that working less hours per day for five days a week redu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, look, so, thus, well, for example, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2088.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23960313945 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466666666667 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9229983466 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.894736842 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6842105263 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15789473684 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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