TPO 30 - Do you agree or disagree? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
Work is an essential part of our lives through which we can get paid and we feed ourselves and our families. We spend most of our time at work thinking about how to make our work and lives better. It is more delightful when we work three days a week for long hours. There are several reasons for this, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, the main reason to work 3 days a week for long hours is to spend more time with friends and families. We all are human beings and get tired of working too much. Consequently, we need a break to share happiness and joyful moment with our loved ones. For instance, I work in a hospital as a nurse for almost 3 years. When I come home after 12 hours of shift, I get so exhausted and jump on the bed right away. But the good thing is I get 5 days a week to spend time with my husband, kids, and friends. It makes my life much more enjoyable when I spend time with them because we go shopping, camping and watch movies together. However, if I had worked for 5 days a week, I would have gotten only 2 days to spend time with my family as two days are not enough since there is plenty of work to do at home such as household chores, run errands, cleaning, and many other things. Therefore, I believe 3 days of working make life much easier and entertaining.
Furthermore, there’s a high likelihood that by working 3 days a week, one can focus on their studies and other jobs. It will improve performance and productivity; individuals can get what they may desire. For example, a couple of years ago, my cousin Sarah wanted to do part-time in her fieldwork to gain experience and get familiarized herself with dentistry. As she was working full time in the insurance company, she could not get time to practice her skills in dentistry. Last year, her insurance company changed the policy of working 3 days a week instead of 5 days a week. She was thrilled by the company’s decision and decided to take the initiative with a part-time job at the dentist's office in her days off. On the other hand, my brother was also working in the same insurance company. Instead of wasting his time, he decided to take advanced courses in computer, which he had been thinking for ages but never really got a chance to do. As you see, working 3 days a week allowed them to do something productive in their lives.
To sum up, to make work more enjoyable, one should work 3 days a week for long hours. This is because in this way one can spend more time with their loved ones and give full attention to kids as well. Also, people can focus on other significant tasks.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 381, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...self with dentistry. As she was working full time in the insurance company, she could not...
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Line 5, column 686, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'dentists'' or 'dentist's'?
Suggestion: dentists'; dentist's
... initiative with a part-time job at the dentists office in her days off. On the other ha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, may, really, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, such as, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2127.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 491.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.33197556008 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42297309338 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492871690428 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4788854959 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.08 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.64 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.56 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318817463268 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100079480474 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0934205372092 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191810268962 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0443219669363 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 58.1214874552 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.83 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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