TPO 30:
It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
As it can be seen, there are several forms of working since each task and business has special conditions and workers have to meet requirements. Some people find it more enjoyable to have a job where they work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where they work five days a week for shorter hours. Personally, I am a fan of the latter tendency, since working less per day and through the whole weekdays divide the pleasure time through weekdays, what is more, I can manage better my tasks including being with family and working. In what follows, an in-depth discussion is presented to elaborate on my perspective.
The first reason to corroborate my notion is that on a job where I can work fewer hours per day and all weekdays, I would be less tired. In fact, in this way, I can divide my whole energy through weekdays and I do not have to pay a strong attention to my work for three days, a shorter time. As I saw in families, whose members work three days, they are really tired of working in a long time a day and they have to take rest in the rest of days since they might take less sleep and their body need a long time to be relaxed. While people work on all weekdays, they do not need to work strongly per day and they will be less tired each day. Hence, they can spend time with their family members each night and get relaxed.
Another significant point, which deserves some words here is that working on weekdays provides me with the opportunity to make a strong schedule for myself. As I mentioned in the body paragraph above, working too much in three days and being off out of work for other days of the week would be tiring and it is hard to make a plan for other activities. To shed more light on my point, when we are tired of work, we need more than usual time to relieve work pressure; in fact, more than usual time other family members take. Ergo, it makes our family plan disturbed. When we have four days free to be relaxed after work, somehow, it is tiring and after that, we do not know what to do for the rest of time. Working through weekdays provides an opportunity in which we can have pleasure each night without being tired of working too much or having fun a lot.
To sum it all up, by taking all the aforementioned grounds into account we may logically draw the conclusion that not only can we have scheduled time for getting relaxed while working five days a week, but it also provides a condition have a well-organized plan for our activities to be no tired of taking rest too much.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, really, so, well, while, in fact, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2071.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.3235908142 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32239473124 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.41127348643 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.9845835083 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.4375 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9375 20.6045352989 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.397237628156 0.236089414692 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150139174283 0.076458572812 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.165164761412 0.0737576698707 224% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.284304708673 0.150856017488 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101759577287 0.0645574589148 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.42 58.1214874552 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.37 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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