TPO-31- Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the pastUse specific reasons and examples to

In this modern age, technology and science are developing and everything is changing fast. This cause so many changes in the way people live. While some may think people are as happy as they were in the past, I believe people were more gratifying than they are today.
First, people tolerate more stress and pressure. Because technology has developed, the job market needs more skilled labor. So, people need to study more to earn these skills and abilities. For achieving this goal, they have to take many exams which cause stress and pressure. The job market is more competitive than before. Unemployment is one of the major problems for people who have fewer skills. People in the past need fewer skills for making money. Besides, because of changes in technology, jobs change too. As a result, people should consistently develop and improve their abilities according to these changes. This lead to having a stress and pressure to do not lose their job if their employers do not need them anymore.
Second, people have less time for having fun. Because employers want to adapt to changes which occur around them, they ask their employees to work for long hours. As a result, people have less time to pass their time with their family and their friends to have a fun. As well, they have fewer leisure times. By being so, people cannot be able to refresh themselves. The main aspects of their lives are their work. For instance, I am working for a company for six days every week. I have to work overtime too. I only have one day on my weekend. I realize I am less happy than I was when I did not work.
To sum up, I think people today are less satisfying than they were in the past because everything is changing fast. Because they tolerate more stress and have a less leisure time.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 546, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...too. I only have one day on my weekend. I realize I am less happy than I was when...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, may, second, so, well, while, for instance, i think, as a result, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1472.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 318.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62893081761 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28205707689 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490566037736 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 464.4 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.7049020933 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 58.88 100.406767564 59% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.72 20.6045352989 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254270370979 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0781264524486 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614651659565 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181741030034 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0301002495988 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.7 11.7677419355 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.69 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.71 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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