TPO-32 - Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

The social interaction has attracted been an appealing topic in the world. A minority of sociologists believe that young people nowadays have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of the communities as a whole. Personally, I bear mind a strong agreement with the belief.

On the one hand, what has been put under consideration is the development of the world. The fact is that the fast-paced changing of society goes along with higher requirements of studying and working. Therefore, it is possible for young people to have priorities on academic tasks or their careers and put much effort into them. As a result, they gradually become so busy that they do not have any moment for being involved in regulating their living environment. This plays a crucial role in explaining their small effects on the important decisions of their communities. More importantly, it cannot be denied that the advancement of the world possesses a large opportunity for the appearances of varied types of entertainment. In this case, young people are inclined to be captivated and spend most of their spare time on attractive recreational activities. On that ground, needless to say, their schedules are able to be filled with studying, working, relaxing activities and there is no space for interacting with their communities. As a consequence, young people are certain to be more uncaring and less involved in the changes of their societies. By and large, the development of the world actually separates adolescents from their duties to their communities.

On the other hand, some people might say that young people nowadays are exposed to a vast source of information. Accordingly, it is more easy for them to acknowledge the current situation and have an influence on the important changes in their communities. However, it is just applicable to a minority. It is widely known that people are becoming more self-center, they do not want to do anything but things for their own sake. It follows that young people will be less concerned about their societies. Furthermore, young people are inexperienced and they have a lot of gaps in their knowledge and abilities. For this reason, it is expected to discourage them to be literally proficient and confident to make the right choices in important situations. Correspondingly, it is apparent that the communities have a tendency to confine young people’s opinions to the matter of references and ignore them. Subsequently, it is understandable that the young nowadays are less involved in important determinations on altering their societies. Beyond any doubt, the idea that the development of the world helps adolescents have more influence on their communities is often possible to end in collapse.

In a word, all factors mentioned above are evidence supporting my agreement. It is highly recommended everyone should take my writing into careful consideration to make a more appropriate decision on understanding the role of young people in the community.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, but, furthermore, however, so, therefore, as a result, by and large, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2552.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 487.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24024640657 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16191230292 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482546201232 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 803.7 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.1370801291 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.08 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.48 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188951145022 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0596049405627 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618353141262 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140460385814 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0567820612874 0.0645574589148 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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