tpo 32 Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
The future of society is built by meticulous plans and industrious dwellers who are always concerned about improving their society in different aspects. The question that arises in this regard is that whether young people have a significant influence on the important decisions that affect the future of society as much as adult people or not. Although some people are inclined toward the idea that the role of youngsters in making a contribution to their society is not considerable and influential, others believe in the young generation's influence in every aspect of society. As far as I am concerned, I am of the opinion that youngsters have an important role in making the future of their societies. In the following paragraph, I will delve into some reasons and examples justifying my point of view.
The first reason coming to my mind is that young people are involved in many important events about making decisions about countries like elections in contrast to the past that aristocratic groups decided about the country. Therefore, it is undeniable to ignore their role in making the future of societies. In today's world, most countries have a democratic government that elects and make important decisions about different aspects of society through an election, in which the majorities of voters are young people. For instance, the result of the valid questionnaire showed the people between the ages of 19 to 35 were the most voters in the recent presidential election in my country.
Another noteworthy reason is that the young generations are leaders and inventors of myriad technological devices and inventions. Since cutting-edge technology permeates almost every facet of people's lives, it can be another indicator of their significant contribution to every society. If you investigate the numbers of young employees in large corporations you will be surprised by the huge numbers of young workers in comparison to the elder ones which indicate their impression of this important part of our modern world. For example, most multinational corporations have age restrictions on their requirement for a new job position as they are aware of the important role of a fresh mind in developing their companies.
To summarize, from what has been discussed above we can conclude that youngsters not only influence their countries through participating in important events such as elections but also by their undeniable role in developing modern technology in their societies.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 288, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in contrast, such as, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2090.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2644836272 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99130239723 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486146095718 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.5182669873 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.285714286 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3571428571 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226106144194 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0860330823813 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645849839763 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135943423202 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0824694379021 0.0645574589148 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 11.7677419355 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 58.1214874552 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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