It is obvious that all people in a society have the right to have their own privacy. Famous individuals because of their popularity among other people have less privacy and in some cases it causes problems for them. I strongly believe that celebrities such as athletes, entertainers, and so on need much more privacy compared with now. In the following paragraph, I will discuss my view using some reasons and examples.
I think today famous individuals have less privacy than the past. With the development of technology news about their private life spread quickly through various media such as TV programs, Internet, social networks, etc. these media are looking for attracting more audiences and viewers to themselves without respecting celebrities' personal life. Therefore, government should ensure more privacy for them. They need to live like ordinary people and this news often leads them to annoy. For instance, last month, in my country, a newspaper revealed romantic relationship between two actors and they were anxious and angry regarding this issue.
Moreover, the lack of privacy damage not only famous people but also their family especially their children. They do no sufficient privacy and they cannot to live similar to ordinary people, and it has affected their normal life. For instance, they are not able to go shopping with their family's members and enjoy it. When their fans see them, they request them to take photographs or to make sing. Thus, people disturb them and waste their time because famous people also need to have their own privacy and to do their daily tasks with freedom similar to others.
Finally, in my point of view, it is not necessary to focus on the popular people' private life excessively. It is a waste of time and money for related companies and other people. It is better for governments assign their budget to do other activities which benefit whole of society. For example, I am fan of some actors and singers and always pursue their news through Internet and magazines. As a result, if there is less news about them, I spend my time on other useful activities.
To sum up, it is beneficial for both famous individuals and ordinary to respect celebrities' private life. Disclosing the secrets of their life has damaging effects on their life. In addition, it is a waste of time and money for companies and youngsters that follow them. Consequently, society should provide more privacy for well-known people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: fanned
...fit whole of society. For example, I am fan of some actors and singers and always p...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ide more privacy for well-known people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, if, look, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, such as, as a result, in some cases, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2064.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04645476773 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56885500309 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515892420538 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.6814097263 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.0 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0416666667 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.79166666667 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154980849557 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524149435344 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481420373902 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.099864330375 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631590470989 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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