It is obvious that all people in a society have the right to have their own privacy. Famous individuals because of their popularity among other people have less privacy and in some cases it causes problems for them. I strongly believe that celebrities such as athletes, entertainers, and so on need much more privacy compared with now. In the following paragraph, I will discuss my view using some reasons and examples.
I think today famous individuals have less privacy than the past. With the development of technology news about their private life spread quickly through various media such as TV programs, Internet, social networks, etc. these media are looking for attracting more audiences and viewers to themselves without respecting celebrities' personal life. Therefore, government should ensure more privacy for them. They need to live like ordinary people and this news often leads them to annoy. For instance, last month, in my country, a newspaper revealed romantic relationship between two actors and they were anxious and angry regarding this issue.
Finally, in my point of view, it is not necessary to focus on the popular people' private life excessively. It is a waste of time and money for related companies and other people. It is better for governments assign their budget to do other activities which benefit whole of society. For example, I am fan of some actors and singers and always pursue their news through Internet and magazines. As a result, if there is less news about them, I spend my time on other useful activities.
To sum up, it is beneficial for both famous individuals and ordinary to respect celebrities' private life. Disclosing the secrets of their life has damaging effects on their life. In addition, it is a waste of time and money for companies and youngsters that follow them. Consequently, society should provide more privacy for well-known people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'fanned'.
Suggestion: fanned
...fit whole of society. For example, I am fan of some actors and singers and always p...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ide more privacy for well-known people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, if, look, regarding, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, such as, as a result, in some cases, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1594.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 311.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12540192926 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69511309184 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556270096463 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.7324974126 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.8947368421 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3684210526 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42105263158 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137604038902 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0478263552675 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050477896536 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.094082716278 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0694204309279 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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