TPO 36-Independent- For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
It is critically important that we realize education systems is the foundation of a country's future. Personally, I believe government should not spend more money on early education than university. I feel this for two reasons which I will explain in the following essay.
To begin with, children's intellectual development and early education are not strongly associated because family is the true definite cause of children's early growth. Investing on juvenile education system would become indecisive when minors should bond and learn from their parents. Early age children should be guided by their parents who will influence them the most. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. My brother, who I grow up with, was not a traditionally smart boy, he would often make mistakes and anger our parents. Despite our poor financial condition, our parents would teach us what we need to know patiently. They would draw cartoon book when we can not afford them. The school system we had is also mediocre at best, but the teachers always encourage us to our best. As a result, my brother along with me got into a decent university in our country.
Furthermore, big financial endowment on young people's education could potential harm adult's career development and advanced research study in the long run, which would lead to economy downsize. A lot university program needs huge financial aid from government and will help both students and academic progress. More fund on advanced academic studies could boost economy and create more jobs. For instance, during my college studies, my friends and I are short in funding to make progress in our sociology studies. Fortunately, we received enough financial aid from both the university and government, which helped us to continue our project. As time went by, we have made great progress and could support people who need assistance by using our knowledge and academic resources. Based on this experience, I strongly believe investing advanced research could benefit more people.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that more grant should be put into university than young people's education. This is because children will need more family support than early age education and university could benefit more people from society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1933.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26702997275 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7246784716 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564032697548 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.960292825 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0476190476 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4761904762 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175896172196 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532318757845 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649835486512 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140837357166 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0874445941017 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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