TPO 37- Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well.
Nowadays, people face various issues which have positive or negative effects on their life. In this matter, they need to choose a best option among different one in order to improve the quality of their lives. While many people hold the opinion that doing very few things well is more beneficial because of having hectic life, others have an opposite viewpoint about this statement. I agree with the first perspective and the reasons to support my point of view is elaborated upon the following paragraphs.
Firstly, people would have a better concentration on their tasks if they do few things rather than a large number of various things. To be more specific, everyone has a specific amount of time which have been allocated to perform their tasks. Therefore, if they assign a wide variety of tasks for themselves they will face one of these situations. They cannot whether complete their tasks on time or execute them in the idea format. In this cases, the results which they imagined for their tasks will not be accomplished. On the other hand, by allocating a great deal of their time and focus to fewer tasks they would reach paramount outcomes.
Moreover, people can implement all their efforts and energy to accomplish better results in the competitive world. To put it other words, nowadays, people need to be more professional in their work and career in order to reach a high position. For instance, imagine a person who allocate his time to carry out a wide array of small occupation in his life in order to prepare a better environment for his family and himself. In this cases, although he affords some money in these jobs, he is not professional in none of these occupation. Therefore, he would not take a decent job in well-known company because these companies look for high experienced person. On the contrary, if people have a good experience in one or two tasks their chance to be successful in taking a job positions in such companies will be increased.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that performing few tasks well have more advantages for individuals rather than doing a lot of things in this sophisticated world. This is because not only can they have a better concentration in their tasks, but also they can be successful in competitive world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...they would reach paramount outcomes. Moreover, people can implement all their...
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...ironment for his family and himself. In this cases, although he affords some money i...
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...jobs, he is not professional in none of these occupation. Therefore, he would not take a decent ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1892.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83887468031 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68871555428 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503836317136 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.3507171459 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 105.111111111 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7222222222 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197526889438 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0657363061998 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0781896383263 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140454818571 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0594978934816 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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