TPO-50 - Integrated Writing Task
The main idea of the both the passage and the talk is about the possibility of sending humans to Mars in the coming decades. In the text, the author claims that there are some problems that should be contemplated in this regard. The lecturer challenges all the problems mentioned in the reading and believes that all of these problems seem to be solvable.
To begin with, the author states that transporting enough supplies of food, water, and oxygen that support for two years is very challenging. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that it is not necessary to transport food, water, and oxygen to Mars. There are another effective method, hydroponics, which can be used in this matter. Hydroponics is cultivation of plant in water rather than soil and it need a little space. Therefore, people can provide food by plant cultivation, water by recycling the wastewater, and oxygen by plant photosynthesis.
In addition, the author asserts that zero-gravity environment of space have detrimental effects on humans' health in long run. On the other hand, the speaker posits that regular exercises is very efficacious method for prevention of decreased muscle mass and lower bone density. Furthermore, individuals are able to use extra vitamin to prevent mentioned problems.
Eventually, the reading passage holds the opinion that solar radiation which radiated from sun is very dangerous and destructive for the spaceships. The lecturer, however, rebuts this idea by pointing out that sun emit severe and dangerous radiation occasionally. Therefore, the spaceships are able to monitor and become aware about this phenomena. As a result, there can spend this time in a protective environments that protected by shield.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 100, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'humans'' or 'human's'?
Suggestion: humans'; human's
...nt of space have detrimental effects on humans health in long run. On the other hand, ...
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Line 7, column 334, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... able to monitor and become aware about this phenomena. As a result, there can spend...
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Line 7, column 405, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'environment'?
Suggestion: environment
...ere can spend this time in a protective environments that protected by shield.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, furthermore, however, so, therefore, in addition, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1454.0 1373.03311258 106% => OK
No of words: 276.0 270.72406181 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26811594203 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90532496435 2.5805825403 113% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572463768116 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 419.366225166 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.7140680832 49.2860985944 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.9333333333 110.228320801 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 21.698381199 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46666666667 7.06452816374 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.2367328918 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 63.6247240618 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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