TPO-37
Do you agree or disagree with the following statements? Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this industrious life, we must run according to the pace of the world otherwise, we may be outdated. Multi-tasking is a kind of skill that is inevitably needed in this era. Some people believe that if we do multiple things together, we can't produce high-quality results. As far as I'm concerned, if we have an effective plan or timetable and a good sense of responsibility we can achieve tremendous and far-reaching effects from it. I have two main rationales to hold this opinion, which I can elaborate upon hereunder.
To begin with, if we have an effort from our side to do things properly according to a well-planned schedule, we can definitely do various tasks in a short duration. Therefore, an effort is needed rather than the number of tasks. In contrast, if people assume that they can perform only certain tasks properly in an ample amount of time, they are underestimating the subjective potential of human beings. My life in the USA is a compelling example of this particular situation. I reached the USA in the year 2018 and I finished my Bachelor's in Dental Surgery (BDS) from India. I need to finish 2 board exams to works as a dentist in the United States. After my arrival, I got pregnant and could not prepare for my boards. However, I made a time table to finish certain portions with a schedule of time. In addition, I managed my health, job, and households together. Cumulatively, through all the struggles, I cleared the 12-hour lengthy examination through the strict sticking to timetable and perseverance. This example clearly illustrates efforts along with a strict plan that can achieve great results even if we do different things together.
Next, if a person has a good sense of responsibility, they can achieve heights as well. Take the instance of a mother. She had a lot of responsibilities in addition to his personal needs. Taking care of children, doing household, cleaning the house, laundry, profession, etc... If she is a responsible mother she can do every job instantaneously without any due. That is why we are calling every mother as multi-taskers. Every mother is a blessing from god.
All in all, by taking all the points into account, I vehemently assure that with an appropriate plan and good responsibility, even though we do so many things together, we can make it perfect. This ability is needed for every individual in society in the long run.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 240, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...t if we do multiple things together, we cant produce high-quality results. As far as...
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Line 1, column 285, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...produce high-quality results. As far as Im concerned, if we have an effective plan...
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Line 5, column 279, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... the house, laundry, profession, etc... If she is a responsible mother she can do ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, therefore, well, in addition, in contrast, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1997.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85888077859 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05184180041 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554744525547 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9390033263 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.88 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.44 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.48 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15616505646 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0384614749194 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591243105982 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0972042139052 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0360837240789 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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